Teacher Feedback – screen castify

We were sent feedback in the form of a screen castify by our teacher so that we could identify what we needed to work on in our video and what to add.

• Dissolve the edges of the panel that shows the seawater
• More close ups of eyes opening
• Make the clip of the leaves falling longer or delete it
• Close up after model starts singing
• Leave the second clip of long shot of model in path till later
• Really good close up of first graffiti clip- shows intimacy
• Zoom in on the midshot of the graffiti wall. Have the model bigger on the left hand side.
• Don’t repeat pathway clips.
• put narrative in instead of whoas
• crop the graffiti wall shots closer
• cut out some of the sitting clips
• cut out a lot of the studio-based ones
• Don’t repeat shots
• Center the car park clip closer
• More close ups
• keep nature for narrative