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Lilli Rose: country girl turned superstar… an overnight transformation

 

Lilli Rose, a stage name sprouted from her first love, the environment. The 22-year old global megastar who is now selling out arenas and smashing chart records worldwide was a local Carlingford girl, was sucked into a world of glamour and pop by her city born extended family when she visited them on her first ever holiday. She soon fell in love with the bright lights and left her unique setting behind. Carlingford is a coastal town and civil parish in northern County Louth of  Ireland and due to this local influence, Rose has given an Irish twist to her new album, Flóra Nimhithe (Irish for “Poisoned Flower”).

 

Lilli had mastered the art of music and entertainment by the young age of 5. Her current sound has been described as a fusion of Avril Lavigne and P!nk seeded with aspects of Nicki Minaj. This leaves her in a perfect position to be recently announced as Britain’s newest ‘pop princess’. Since leaving her quiet, picture-postcard home, she has supported the likes of Marilyn Manson, Panic! At the Disco, and is set to tour with Girls Aloud on their new comeback tour (see page 14). When Lilli sat down with us during her busy day of album signings and recording, we asked the rising megastar how it felt to have been recently promoted to the likes of Christina Aguilera and Katy Perry, she responded, “it is a true honour to be placed on this level, I never thought I’d truly reach this level, however all that really matters is pleasing my ever-loyal fans”. Britney Spears’ reputation of ‘pop princess’ has been utterly tarnished due to a recent drug scandal, Lilli also spoke on this matter, “it is such a shame to see talent to go to waste, however I’d expect a comeback from the powerful 90’s chick in no time”.

 

Back in 2008, a feud was brewing between the presenter of her own chat show, Charlotte Church and leading British girl group Girls Aloud. Church, joined by Jason Donovan on her Channel 4 chat show, began to discuss the topic of castrated dogs, when she suddenly made the remark, “If I wanted five dogs without balls, I’d just have bought Girls Aloud”, later on “Davina”, they were asked whether to respond, in which they proudly stated they were “too mature to sink to her level”. Rose became involved almost instantly, due to her personal connection with their Irish member Nadine Coyle, she took a more direct route to responding to the issue. “I was fuming. Global humiliation, I needed to hit back hard.” A twitter war ensued until Church apologised for her actions as Rose had won the battle, “I am loyal to my family and my friends, in addition to my fans they are the most important things to me.” Due to her loyalty and strong friendship with the girls, Lilli Rose will tour with Girls Aloud on their comeback event, “Twenty”, marking twenty years since their victory on “Popstars: The Rivals” in 2002.

 

Flóra Nimhithe”, will be released next year and will be followed up by a european tour (needless to say Girls Aloud could be involved). When asked how she felt about the theme and context of her new album being centered around her childhood and the place she grew up in, Lilli responded, “Carlingford is a really special place to me, I want to give back to the wonderful community I grew up in, it truly is a remarkable place.” There has been speculation whether a genre change is in place from Pop-Punk to Gaelic, Lilli stated that no such thing would happen, “I will never veer far from my pop-punk basis, yet some celtic fusion may be in order to take me back to my roots, after all, it was this beauteous setting which inspired me to inspire others”. Lilli’s tour is set to take place in many locations across Europe, North America, and even further afield into Asia and Oceania. Lilli began to discuss what she was most looking forward to, this was clear, “My tour. I love meeting the fans and seeing their reactions to both my older and newer hits. I have many new things lined up to try out so this tour will be slightly more experimental, ‘Rosebuds’… watch out.”

 

Transitioning from a young Irish girl helping her father sell vegetables from the roadside, to being a global superstar engaging in twitter wars and selling out arenas is not the clearest pathway for everyone, but for Lilli, it was the path which shined the brightest; almost as bright as the spotlight surrounding her image as a star and musician.

I then received various targets in relation to my written article from a peer:

  1. There were various punctuation and grammar mistakes which needed correction.
  2. Some sentences were far too long and needed to be shortened, punctuated or just separated with full stops.
  3. More scene setting was required at the beginning of the article.

I corrected these mistakes to be placed into my final copy.

 

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