Bellow is my draft of my contents page
![](https://blogs.grammar.sch.gg/bensolway/files/2020/11/finished-contents-page-.jpg)
I got one of my peers to asses my contents page and say what was good and what needs improving for when I do my second draft or real thing. This feedback will help because then I can use it to make my contents page excellent.
CONTENTS PAGE PEER ASSESSMENT
What type of shots have been used to create a variety of shot distances and how has the camera been used to communicate meaning?
This is a mid shot in the page make sure to put more variety of range in pages.
What choice of Mise en scene is appropriate for the star image and genre?
The make up fits and so does the outfit. The model looks relaxed. I feel a more aggressive or interesting picture with something a bit more fitting to rap.
How far is the font used readable and reflects the genre?
The font is readable but may look better if spaced out more.
What technical conventions of a Contents page are present and used effectively?
Well laid out
How has Indesign been used to layout the page to convey a brand?
Layout is good but needs to have more branding to make it recognisable, maybe a logo?
How well have the text and visuals been integrated together?
The text and the visuals have been integrated well with colors and themes working well together with the visuals.
Where has photoshop been used to manipulate the photos to enhance the star image or genre?
The photo has been cut out and done well in photoshop nothing needing to be changed
How is the language used appropriate for the genre and target audience?
Language is good yet maybe some more interesting titles to catch attention
He gave it a Level 4 in the end.
Things to improve on:
- Take more shots from different angles and heights
- Maybe make my artists more aggressive and rappy?
- Space font better
- Needs the Brand logo somewhere
- More interesting catching titles