February 1

Teacher Feedback and Final Targets

My teacher went through my whole music magazine and make suggestions to tweak and improve my product, these are listed below.

FRONT COVER PAGE:

  • adding more insets pugs and plugs on my front cover page
  • make a background for my front cover possibly the blue netting on Ollie’s coat and have fun with it on Photoshop so the white background doesn’t look as flat play on transparency to make it pop
  • make the barcode on my front cover smaller
  • add addition and month details
  • add the word indie or britpop

CONTENTS PAGE:

  • picture of editor or a signature
  • who are the models eg band caption it etc
  • make the photos at an angle
  • put the contents text lower on the cd covers
  • play with photos white borders
  • add transparency

DOUBLE PAGE SPREAD:

  • make the stand first font bigger
  • another drop capital later on
  • be careful where the staple might be in the centre of writing
  • see if caption is better on one side or the other
  • picture on the top right needs a caption
  •  italicised quotes o back in pixelaeted font
January 26

Advert

Above is an advert that I have chosen to put within my magazine. I chose this ‘Expedia’ advert for my Britpop magazine as the target audience of my magazine is young adults seeking a thrill for life so they would be likely to book a holiday especially with a quick and easy website based travel agent. The words used on the advert: ‘sun’ , ‘sea’, ‘snd’ and ‘sex’ would appeal to my target audience as this is probably what they would be looking for in a holiday as they are young adults looking to get away from home with friends. The font used is similar to that of many album covers of the Britpop genre. They have used the conventional ‘boarding pass’ font, this connotes ideas of travel and creating memories. Many young adults reading my magazine would be likely to be going away to festivals. Again, these words used give the impression that this is what will occur during their trip.

Image result for fender ad

Within this advert, a vintage look is being portrayed which caters for my target audience. This is because they like to reminisce and appreciate old music, such as my cover star Ollie Brun does, he talks about this in his interview how his influences include The Beatles for example. The black and white colour scheme corresponds with my simple red, white, blue, white and black.

 

I used yougov.co.uk to relate back to my target audience, this allowed me to find out Britpop listeners interest and what they watch and what they like to do.

January 18

Feedback on Article-Peer Voice Memo

Above is the recording of Macy reading then analysing my work.

To enable myself to receive more varied feedback, one of my peers, Macy Jackson read my article out loud in order to see whether everything made sense and if there was any typos and corrections I needed to make so that I can improve my writing and magazine as a whole.

Targets for Development:

  • use more commas in places so it has more flow
  • used accidental plurals
  • enjoy the brutality of the star images behavior
  • transitioned in in and out
  • on paragraph 3 I ended with the talking about the council estate then started the next paragraph with a similar comment, space it out to create more flow

 

 

 

January 8

Language Analysis

‘Q Magazine (Sept 1 2017), Cash For Questions This Month: Alt J, Paul Stokes’

  • The structure of the article has a Q&A style
  • The reader is not aware of the presence of journalist. You can tell this because each question has been submitted by a reader eg ‘Amy Tilson, Broughton’. These are shown in the red text underneath each question. This creates an impactful connection between the audience/readers of the magazine and the magazine itself. It creates a bond so the reader will go back to reading this same magazine again.
    • Certain colloquial words are used to create a relatable impression towards the band ,such as the laid back conversational style of Q&A
    • The mode of address is how the journalist is speaking to the audience, but in this article it is the band talking to the audience as they are answering questions rather than an article in the third person about them 
    • The whole article is made up of quotes which are used to portray Alt J as a relatable, laid back group 
    • The reader should experience a connection with the band and now have more knowledge about them as a result of reading the article because it is full of fresh information that the band have exposed during this Q&A style article, they should also experience a sense of satisfaction as their questions have now been answered

 

  • CONCLUSION:Paul Stokes represents the band as relatable and laid back. This is shown when unavailing the bands humble beginnings and their nerdy vibe that they present to their listeners. This is proven when Gus Unger-Hamilton is asked what the worst thing he did in school was he confesses to copying his friends homework and then goes on to state ‘I am aware that has done nothing is dispel our nerdy image’.

 

January 5

Feedback and Targets on all pages from teacher – Screen Castify

Click on the video in order to watch it.

By doing this Screen Castify with my teacher Mrs Cobb I am now able to look back and curate targets for myself and all my posts.

These include:

FRONT COVER PAGE:

  • adding more insets pugs and plugs on my front cover page
  • make a background for my front cover possibly the blue netting on Ollie’s coat and have fun with it on Photoshop so the white background doesn’t look as flat play on transparency to make it pop
  • make the barcode on my front cover smaller
  • add addition and month details
  • add the word indie or britpop

CONTENTS PAGE:

  • picture of editor or a signature
  • who are the models eg band caption it etc
  • make the photos at an angle
  • put the contents text lower on the cd covers
  • play with photos white borders
  • add transparency

DOUBLE PAGE SPREAD:

  • make the stand first font bigger
  • another drop capital later on
  • be careful where the staple might be in the centre of writing
  • see if caption is better on one side or the other
  • picture on the top right needs a caption
  •  italicised quotes o back in pixelaeted font