Specsavers Feedback

Summary of feedback and targets (bullet pointed) List new technical / creative ideas YouTube tutorials that might help

Feedback :

During lesson, we had 2 visitors from Specsavers who came in to watch, and give advice on our music videos. As one of the visitors watched our video of our first draft, he pointed out key aspects to focus on when filming and how they can be manipulated in premiere pro. These were all points that could help improve the quality and emotional tone of the narrative.

The feedback they gave was; that the first draft cut was very effective and used interesting shots of the girl and portrayed the themes of failures, he also stated that we needed to focus on making the stairs look even more abstract to juxtapose the naturalism of the school scenes. With these improvements, the shoots will become an ever lasting kind of optical illusion, this would help justify a clearer narrative and make it extremely effective.

Targets :

  • think about angles and composition
  • use more interesting angles
  • emotions within shots
  • make it confusing
  • remove the context
  • make it feel like just stairs
  • be selective with stairs
  • keep it graphical
  • edit shots
  • no blindfold
  • make shots seem confusing
  • pick a barrier and a door

List of new technical and creative ideas :

  • use barriers to compose shots
  • use doors to give context
  • overlap shots in editing
  • edit the shots in effective ways
  • make it abstract
  • make the shots very graphical
  • smoothly edit together shots for flow
  • make the transitions smoother


YouTube Tutorials :

Shoot 2 Reflection (Narrative)


The shoot 3, which took place at school for the naturalistic scenes went well, many shots were obtained that can effectively be used in our music video. There were 6 different scenes throughout the shoot, which can be found on the narrative storyboard post, that helped us portray loads of different emotions in very different ways. By using the props that related to each scene made it look even more naturalistic to fit the narrative of the video which helped make the shots successful.

The girl being dressed in the same clothes as on the stairs makes a clear link to the abstract and realistic shots, every aspect in the school shots is very realistic helping to set the tone of failures and struggles in school helping it to be more relatable to a target audience.

For the final shoot on the stairs we will use the tripod more often to help get focused and steady shots, we will get more interesting and abstract shots to help provide the tone for the music video in the stair climbing scenes. More interesting angles will make the video appear more exciting and immersive for the audience to watch, giving a powerful effect of the music video.


The targets for the final shoot of the music video:

  • have the camera on a tripod
  • have steady shots
  • make sure the shots are in focus
  • Get a stronger sense of emotion
  • Have more of a weak and useless emotion rather than a happy approach (our model is generally a very cheerful and happy person, making these shots of sadness a challenge)
  • Have more shot to action scenes.

Risk Assessment

Risk Assessment for Shoot 2 (Narrative)

Here is the risk assessment for the shoot we’re doing on Tuesday the 15th of September, here it covers all basic threats or risks,  and this we need to be wary of.

We have also included two to approach some of the obstacles of risk, as well as contact numbers incase we need to contact the school.

Video Narrative Story sheets

Here is a mini story board of what to expect from the upcoming shoot on Tuesday, that is if all goes to plan.

The props that will be included in this will be :

  • mirror
  • books / pens
  • food / lunch
  • mascara
  • blindfold
  • photos of girl

The costume that will be needed will be :

  • white dress
  • white shoes


  • black jumper
  • black joggers
  • black shoes

We are going for a theme of ‘life is a constant battle’. Meaning that everything can be a challenge in life, and everyone deals with it different. We are trying to raise awareness of mental health issues, especially in teenagers as they are the main audience that is affected by mental health in todays society.

The music video will have deliberate open ended ways of portraying different life situations, some which may not be resolved, but some that may be. These are deliberate to show that not everything in life can be resolves, but rather helped and ease the pain of the situation.

Narrative Development

Here is our narrative sheet, here we went through a rough and detailed view on what our ideal music video should include.

Our music video is 100% narrative, meaning the performer doesn’t make any appearance in the video. We have decided to keep to a Anachronic + Parallel type of narrative as it best portrays the theme. 

Music Video Draft 1 – Rough Cut

Self assessment :

From our music video first shoot, we have managed to experiment with loads of different shots, using different MES and angles. This has opened up our understanding of how to experiment and how different shots can portray different meaning by the slightest thing, we have managed to use a wide range of different locations to show different stages of life and how life can be represented. We have managed to compose these shot into a very rough first draft of our music video, where we have decided to go full narrative, I admit our shots don’t quite line up with the meaning behind the song, so we need to rearrange this and have more shots with our shoot 2, but we will make sure the shots are more smooth and have more of an edge and have more of an impact to the lyrics. We have a strong range of shots which contrast and compliment each other very well, we will need to do some reshoots to amend some of the blurry and wobbly shots, but for the most part we managed to get most of the videos in the music video representing our presentation of struggling in life, this is one by the constant confusion in her face, the comparison of facial expressions, and the endless stair shot showing it never ends.

In our next draft, we will make sure these segments are aimed at more of a teenage audience due to this being a teenager struggling with her health, we are basically promoting that life isn’t always easy, and we should be aware that people struggle in different ways. The next draft can be much more powerful than. the first draft, because we can play with the shots and positioning of the camera, while adding in transitions and editing techniques. This will hopefully make the audience engaged and intrigued to watch it again.

Targets for improvement :

  • Better representation of narrative
  • Cleaner editing
  • Add more transitions and make them smoother
  • Add in the other half of the narrative (to be filmed)
  • Make the storyline link to the lyrics and meaning of the song

Targets for improvement from teacher :

  • Media :
  • Make the still photos black and white while having photo props
  • Include close up with blind fold 
  • Symbolic colour with happy and sad when she’s running 
  • Make sure the shots don’t show still, make sure they’re moving 
  • The lawn mower ruins the shot  
  • Make sure there’s no repeat shots 
  • Need more doors, opening and closing
  • Photos in black and white
  • Connection with him with photos 
  • Maybe add some performance with just close up of mouth 
  • Make all sad stuff in black and white (hand held, POV)

Shoot 1 Reflection (Performance)

Photos from behind the scenes include :

Evaluation :

I believe the our first shoot went well, we covered loads of different types of shots, with different angels and different setting. Our main focus for the this shoot was to get the stair shots for the most part completed, and mainly having a play around, it is on the agenda to look through all the shots and decide whether we are in need of more shots depending on quality, but for the most part and what we’ve gone through os far, we have loads of different shots which convey different meaning by the use of CLAMPS.

From the roughly 3 hours of shooting, we managed to get around 150 videos which convey different meaning which will help us edit and portray our narrative for our teenage demographic.

Targets :

From this shoot, it has come to our attention that maybe some of our shots were out of focus and a bit wobbly, from a creative aspect we can make that work for our narrative of a never ending mental episode of life. However they weren’t what we went into the shoot looking for, so if it comes to it, our group is more than happy to reshoot and get more clear and steady videos.

I believe we also need more emotions to be conveyed through our actress to show more feelings of fear and realism of life.

What I need to take from this shoot is, not everything is gonna be perfect first time, but we need to be prepared to deal with what we’ve got or make arrangements to redo this.