Mrs Cobb looked through all 3 pages of my music magazine and created a screen castify that included the tips and targets that she thought would make my magazine reach the potential that it deserves.

Front cover; 

• More block writing like the one in the top right hand corner.
• Make the bottom banner bigger and bolder like the one in the corner.
• Jazz up the background more to make it less plain.
• Make ‘Simply pop’ bigger.
• Make the writing inside the pug more center in the circle.
• Move the pug.
• Move the big cover line away from Dani’s face. Change sizing of the cover lines to make them look better.
• Put more cover lines on her shoulder.
• Change the spelling of Beiber.

Contents page; 

• Jazz up the background more to make it less plain.
• Make Emilia bigger.
• Make contents smaller.
• Make ‘simply pop’ the same as on the front cover.
• Put a page number on the bottom of the page.
• Sort out the cover lines as they look messy.
• Add a block of color.
• Bring white into it.

Double page spread; 

• Bring page numbers down.
• Who is the article by?
• Make facts about Dani more interesting. E.g. color and boarders.
• Articles need to finish at the same place.
• Put quote by her face on the right.
• Change font of headline.
• Add stand fist.
• Keep spaces between paragraphs.
• Cut her hair out better in the right photo.