This is the article that I will soon be drafting and incorporating into my double page spread. My article is about my cover star who is a new artist in the industry and it demonstrates a Q&A format. I decided to add in some screenshots of tweets that people had sent in to make the article a bit more interesting and the Q&A a bit more realistic.

Peer voice memo

Below is a voice memo of  my sister reading over my article with feedback at the end. It’s a good idea to get somebody else to read over your article before you submit it to make sure that it reads well and that you haven’t missed any spelling or punctuation mistakes.

Targets

Overall they liked my article but they did give a few tips and targets that I could improve on in order to allow my article to read as well as it can.

• Make the first sentence small and add more punctuation because there are no pauses.
• Take out the ‘I owe it all to him’ when talking about her Grandad because it kind of says that in the rest of the paragraph and I am repeating it.
• Take out the ‘haha’ when talking about the NYR because journalists wouldn’t say that they would put brackets and say (laughs). Make ‘OMG’ actually read ‘Oh My God’ because not a lot of people would normally say ‘OMG’ now a days.