Below are the adverts I have decided to incorporate into my magazine. I decided to chose these as I followed the dating profile I previously made for my Target Audience, my target audience is mainly based on a typical teenager who is obsessed with new pop music and fashion, which showed what would appeal to that audience.

I have chosen these particular adverts because…

• they appeal directly to my target audience
•  they fit my genre
• they follow the aesthetics of my magazine
• they are eye- catching but not enough to take the focus away from my designs
• they fit the age range of my target audience

My targets from feedback…

Front cover…

• move the main mast head as the bar code is covering part of one of the letters.
• mover pug lower down

Contents…

• change the photos at the bottom to a white block with photos from the shoot
• fix the line spacing
• expand on the girl band “who are they?”
• possibly add an editorial if there is still excess space

Double Page Spread…

• move photography by to the other side
• hyphenate the article
• on the first question change the line spacing so that the graphic line isn’t as close to the font
• justification of paragraphs
• stand first bolder and bigger
• align top of columns

My Targets…

Front cover…

• leave more bleed and slug area
• make the cover image bigger
• make the main coverline bigger
• add more yellow
• add more coverlines, make the cover more busy
• make the coverlines bigger and more eye catching
• change the plain masthead to something more interesting

Contents page…

• the font doesn’t follow the conventions of a pop magazine
• make the coverlines upper case
• add a page number
• the fade on the contents heading is too pale (could outline)
• alignment of coverlines and description
• fix staggering of numbers
• check spelling accuracy
• utilise empty space (add an editors welcome)

Double Page Spread…

• make sure there is more bleed and slug area
• check accuracy of spelling
• bring the title of the article down
• hyphenate the article and stand first
• add in a drop capital
• make column width more accurate to the layout of the DPS
• image is squashed
• cover the branding on models top
• put magazine logo somewhere on page
• try different colour schemes
• add graphic designs to make it more interesting
• add a ‘to be continued” at the end of unfinished article.

Above is my improved contents page, I decided no to change too much with this contents page as it follows what i would like it to look like however, I believe that I can improve several things these are…

• add more eye catching details
• improve the heading to be more interesting
• possibly add in an extra information section

Above is my new improved draft of my double page spread…

What I changed…

• added a byline
• added who the photography was by
• added page number
• changed the line spacing on the article
• added a drop capital

What I need to improve…

• fix the layout of the article so that it aligns on both sides
• fill the blank space at the bottom (maybe add a quote)
• further fix the layout and line spacing

Above is the first draft of my contents page…

What I have gone for…

• I decided to go for a fairly simple contents page as I believe that this is best for my readers as it is easy to navigate.
• I chose a simple yet bold color scheme to draw my reader in.

What I would like to improve…

• Change the heading.
• Add more intricate details in.

In this exclusive double page article of Thunder magazine, we have been  getting to know named most popular male artist of 2019, Charli. With an in depth interview with him we’ve got all the answers you ever wanted to know about him, and some exclusives of what he is planning in the near future. 

Charli has been labelled as the leading male artist of 2019, for his recent headline grabbing  success at changing the game of pop all within the space of just one year. Charli has always been passionate about music and performing, this is highlighted by his early career before he became famous in the world of wider music and the media. Music has been close to Charli’s heart starting out at the tender age of 4 when he took to the stage in amateur performances  and then went onto win coveted roles on the West End stage from the age of 14. These began with very minor roles however he eventually grew into some of the most famous leading roles in the West End including Wicked, Matilda the Musical, Mamma Mia! however as you will find out, Charli has designs on even more fame and fortune. 

How did you deal with the pressure of your overwhelming success?

My success and fame hit me like a ton of bricks! I never expected how it would all pan out. , It all started when my friend posted a video of me showing her my song called falling, which was actually the song that brought attention to me and the first single I published. I created and it blew up from there. People found the video and asked me to releasethe song I had created. I believe that because my career lifted off so quickly I never had time to process it so I  think I never had time to deal with the pressure; it kind of just fueled me to go bigger and get better! 

How do you keep your music unique and do you think you have changed the way people look at the genre of pop?

I don’t think I’ve changed the pop genre I think I’ve given it a new feel, a more refreshed version.  Many people do say that my music is very unique however, I just think it’s my style so it’s true to who I am, that clearly makes me a unique person! However, all jokes aside I like to experiment with my music and create different sounds and beats that are unusual and that people haven’t heard before, this keeps people interested as its not mainstream and its different to what they are hearing all the time. 

What’s coming up on your agenda?

I have many plans, lots of things that have been announced, a lot of things that haven’t been announced and a lot of things are in the works, I’m extremely busy. Obviously, I have been announced as one of the main headliners of the UK festival reading and Boardmasters, I am also starting my tour in late 2020. But most importantly, I’m always writing new music and always exploring new sounds, so you will never be without any content from me! 

As Charli said he is planning on making more content for his audience. Well Thunder magazine has an exclusive from Charli himself, he has announced to Thunder that he is planning on releasing his new album named ‘Elevate’ in early June. Keep reading Thunder for the latest exclusives from Charli. ‘Never stop working hard, and you will reach where you want to be in life’ ‘Never be a sheep, be your own person and people will look up to you’.  These final quotes from Charli perfectly sum up how anyone can reach where they want to be just keep your passions close to you and never forget about them.

Above is my adapted improved article , here are some of the things I improved…

• I added more detail
• I added examples to make it more specific

What I think I could add to make it even better…

• Even more detail, specifics
• Add different perspectives to the article to give the reader even more of an insight