In order to develop my magazine, getting someones else’s view is important. Here is my feedback from Olly on my article. He recognised my use of programmes to manipulate images and integrate them well with the rest of my page and text. I’m happy he also understood the genre was indie based but he did say maybe hip-hop also which I think was down to the quirky route I’ve taken and the fashion of my model. Personally I think I need to re read all my article and headline for my contents page and check accuracy and think of a more creative headline rather than a quote.
I then also got my peer to read my article aloud to help me get an understanding for the flow or the article and if it reads well and authentically. The recording is attached below:
I think the article read well and the language kept it informal and chatty but still informative.