Feedback From Teacher

Using Screencastify, our teacher provided us with some feedback and targets in order to help improve our next draft for our music video.

Feedback Given

  • Use some better shots in the video of the performer singing as often it looks as if he does not know the words at times.
  • Often the shift between the rooms in the performance can become confusing to stick to using one room as it sometimes it can get confusing.
  • In the narrative section of the video, do not repeat shots already used.
  • Use more close ups throughout the music video.
  • Immediately when the performer begins singing cut to a visual of the star to connect the voice to a face.
  • Shorter shots are needed throughout as often some shots are held for too long.
  • The narrative is introduced too quickly. More shots of the musicians are required first.
  • Stabilise shots to stop them from shaking.
  • More narrative is needed scattered in the video to create a nice split between the performance and narrative.
  • The narrative videos should flick through and cut between shot quickly as if he is reflecting on his memories.

Music Video Draft Two Including Narrative

What was successful?

  • The video had the narrative section added in differing from our first draft which was solely performance.


What was unsuccessful?

  • The visuals need to be continuous throughout the music video following the narrative and performance so the lighting also needs to be consistent. Re-colouring may also help relate to our genres conventions.


Targets For Improvement

  • Add in more narrative shots because the story needs more presence in the video in order to make sense.
  • Between shots, the lighting can change vastly so in post production make the shots the same colour and lighten them so the continuity throughout the video is smoother and will contribute to the conventions of our indie alternative genre.
  • More effects and transitions between shots are needed as that is lacking at the moment.
  • Faster cuts increasing speed with more angles and distances will help to build the tension in the music video.

Narrative Shoot Reflection

The Narrative Shoot took place over a series of days at different location both outside and in a studio. I think it went well as we collected a large range of shots on location but also ensured during the studio shoot we got those close ups which is key for our music video.

Our original idea was to have a man in a hospital bed looking back on his life and memories where we would see him inside the exterior narrative shots as well however we decided that perhaps it would be better if we filmed the outside shot through our characters point of view therefore it would allow our audience to become connected more with the character as they reflect back on his life through his own eyes creating the big question is he still alive in the coma and the entrapment vs the freedom he once had.

On location within our group we went out and gathered a large variety of footage including different angles and distances which we could use in the montage flashback sequences. We created a list of all the different locations and shots we wanted to gather that we thought our central character might have experienced in his life with the different senses including flowers, at the beach and traffic.

Targets and Improvements

  • Some of the shots were slightly shaky which can be fixed in post production using the stabiliser tool but make sure that during filming all the shots are stable using a tripod.

I am extremely pleased overall with what we achieved during our narrative shoot because we now had lots of different shot distances and angles that are conventional with our music genre. This allows us to create a successful Narrative Shoot following the blueprint in order to fulfil the contract of our music video.

Production Meeting Agenda For Narrative Shoot

The group and I devised a Production Meeting Agenda for our Narrative Shoot which will greatly help us during the shoot process because we have mapped everything out already so we know exactly what is happening. I have spent time making decisions that will have great impact on how the music video is portrayed successfully using Mise-En-Scene to connect with the conventions of our Indie Alternative Genre.

The meeting agenda will be useful because it will give our shots a professional look and we can refer to it exactly in order to be successful.

Narrative Storyboard

In our group we created two storyboards for each of our narrative shoots. It was highly important to complete this task because as a group we needed to agree on what shots we were getting so that would be organised and well prepared for the shoots in order to be extremely successful and obtain lots of valuable footage. We can refer to this and clearly see exactly what we would like to achieve for each shot.

Narrative Development

So as a group we could easily identify what needs to be considered for our Music Video Narrative in order for it to relate and replicate our Indie Alternative genre, we created a Narrative Development Sheet.

Creating this Narrative Sheet has allowed us to establish exactly what different types of Mise-En-Scene and Location will be required to present our narrative that is conventional for our genre.

We used the Sheet to develop our ideas and decided to move away from the traditional narrative of a story and music video with a beginning, middle and end. We decided to base our music video’s narrative at the end of the story and have flashbacks throughout of the mans life linking to our theme of entrapment inside the coma vs freedom of the life he once led until eventually we see at the equilibrium that there might possibly be hope of life.

The Narrative Sheet will be extremely useful because it will give our shots a professional look as we will be more prepared with our Mise-En-Scene and Narrative as we can refer to it exactly in order to be successful.

Narrative Arc Stop Motion

In order to gain a better understanding of narrative structure, I created a short 30 second stop motion video following a simple narrative. Included was my knowledge on the types of characters that contribute towards the narrative and a traditional narrative arc.

Does it fulfill the traditional narrative structure?

This Narrative Stop Motion Video fulfills the traditional narrative structure extremely successfully because I began with an Introduction to the story where a man was attacked by a dolphin. The rising action of the story takes place when the attacker hits the man on the head and leaves him lying on the floor creating a disturbance in the narrative. A fourth character is introduced during the resolution stage to see if the man is okay however due to mistaken identity he was arrested by the policeman for a crime he did not commit when in fact he was trying to help the other man making equilibrium.

Do the characters fulfill conventional character types?

In a Traditional Narrative Structure, Characters that are conventional that you would expect to see are a Protagonist and Antagonist. My stop motion video included both of these: The vulnerable man, who acted as the protagonist in the story, and the attacker, who was the antagonist. Most stories and narratives include a hero and a villain where the plot tends to move around them, similarly to mine.

Are there Binary Oppositions?

Binary Oppositions are related terms or concepts that are opposite in meaning. There are multiple examples within my stop motion video of binary oppositions. There is the strong contrast between the characters of the man who stops to check the other man is okay and the attacker whose motives were negative presenting his bad nature which creates a juxtaposition within the story. In a Traditional Narrative Structure, friction is displayed between the antagonist and protagonist characters where historically the protagonist wants to aid and make things better where the antagonist lives for the destruction of other characters and is often the direct enemy of the protagonist showing the binary oppositions of kindness vs malice between the characters.

Explain how Music Video narratives can differ from these conventional ideas i.e. are able to play with time and space, are episodic, are anachronic, are thematic and don’t always have an ending so that they are repeatable etc.

A large majority of music videos differ from the conventional ideas as they can be episodic, anachronic, thematic and are able to play with time and space often without an ending to the narrative.