Our Final Pitch

Positive Feedback:

• Loved our idea and the symbolism behind it
• Good mise-en-scene
• The simple storyline works well
• The performance is subtle but the imagery with the umbrella and the ‘weather changing’ is effective and fits with the narrative
• The locations fit the genre of the music and create an effective ambience
• The pitch was well thought through and presented well

Targets to improve:

• Take pictures of the locations so you’re certain where you are performing
• Make sure there is enough lighting in the bunker
• Ensure the actors are prepared with choreography and rehearsed
• Discover one more location to film in
• Make sure the actions are different from each other to emphasize the difference in characters
• Experiement with elongating the plot to emphasize she doesn’t belong in the society