2 Appropriate Adverts for my Audience

I feel that the above 2 advertisements would be appropriate for my target audience. I chose the poster for the Women’s March as those who enjoy Indie music are likely to be politically aware leftists who care about activism and getting their voices heard. I chose the advertisement for streetwear brand Lazy Oaf, as, based on my research, my audience are likely to be fashion forward. On top of this, the company value rebellion and non-conformity, an ideology that runs throughout the Indie genre.

New Draft

Peer Assessment

Summary

• Colour palette ties the cover and contents page together
• The contents page is within the same font family as the cover
• Can tell that the magazine is for Indie music
• Adjectives to describe the stars fit the conventions of the genre
• Cover lines encourage audience engagement
• Cover lines convey that it’s a music magazine
• Has the conventional features of a contents page

My thoughts based on this feedback is that overall I have managed to create a successful contents page for my music magazine.

First Draft

For the first draft of cover page, I followed the outline of my hand drawn draft and added my own images and text. Some feedback I received for this draft was:

• Strong background
• Interesting layout
• ‘Contents’ title well defined
• Graphic of photos/borders well done
• Article descriptions and titles hard to read against background
• ‘And also…’ section is unconventional
• Text is too small

For my next draft of the contents page, I will focus on these targets:

• Make the article titles and descriptions stand out more against the background to increase legibility
• Alter ‘and also’ section at the bottom of the page
• Increase the text size so that it’s more readable

Three Draft Layouts for Contents Page

 Five Possible Headlines

• Your New Favourite Band!
• The Very Best of 2019
• We asked *artist* what YOU wanted to know!
• The truth about *artist*
• All About the Artist

Conventions of a Contents Page

• Large title
• Page number
• Article titles which gauge interest
• Short descriptions of articles
• Images, often in various sizes
• Feature of the cover story
• Limited colour scheme
• Columns, or division of some variety between various segments

Thoughts

I have chosen my second drawing for the layout of my contents page, as I feel that this layout is unique and bold, something that I want through my magazine as it emphasizes the magazine’s value of individuality. I think that this will also aid in gauging my audiences interest as it is interesting to look at, causing them to desire reading the rest of the magazine.

New DPS Draft

Commentary

Some changes that I have made to my first draft of my DPS are:

• Enlarged photo to draw more focus to the star
• Minimized the standfirst so that it isn’t so dense and hard to read
• Moved the quotation onto the body text and used text wrap to make it stand out more
• Edited body font to make it more aesthetically pleasing

Feedback from 1st draft of DPS

Some feedback that I received for my first draft of my double page spread was:

• Good photo, but enlarge it a bit more
• Framing of photo good
• Move the quote to break up the article
• Good typeface for article title
• Stand first too long
• Different body font

Targets for Next Draft

• Enlarge photo a bit more
• Move quote onto body text
• Shorten standfirst
• Change body font

First Draft – Double Page Spread

Conventionally, a double page spread is an article that takes up 2 pages and is usually the ‘big story’ of the magazine. Some of the main conventions of double page spreads are:

• A large image, often on the left, and writing which is never split by the staple line
• Stand-first – An introduction to the article
• Drop capital – a capital letter which extends down a couple of lines of text at the start of a paragraph
• Quotes, which are often used to break up the text
• By line – says who the article is by
• Direct address – star breaks the fourth wall
• Columns to break up the text
• Colour scheme consistent with the rest of the magazine
• Page numbers
• Appropriate language/register for audience

I feel that I have successfully used a number of these conventions in the construction of the first draft for my double page spread, such as sticking to the consistent colour scheme, a large image, and a quotation from the star.

Contact Sheet – Location Shoots

Favourite Images

The four images above are my favourites from my location photoshoot, and I feel that I have achieved my aim of effectively conveying the Indie genre through these images. I like these photos especially, as I think the framing of my model is effective, the colours well balanced, the poses conventional, and the photos of good quality overall.

Improved Article

In 2014, Sylvie created her YouTube channel, where she would upload covers and original music, as well as more personal content about her experiences with the mental illness known as Depersonalisation Disorder, or DPD. The combination of her ethereal sound and her lyrical honesty surrounding this lesser-known disorder gained her a small but devoted fanbase, and she’s become their symbol of hope through darker times.

Since the release of her debut album ‘i feel sick.’ last September, Sylvie has been on the road, touring globally to audiences of adoring fans. She took the time to come in and speak to us after the Asian leg of her worldwide tour, ‘F@!# My Feelings’, and we asked her what you wanted to know.

Q&A with Sylvie

Hi Sylvie! Thank you for coming in today!

It feels so weird to be here, I’ve read Violet since I was 14, I never thought I’d feature in an article! Thank you for having me!

So how’s the tour going?

Oh my gosh, honestly it’s so incredible. I love travelling and music and meeting my fans and it’s a combination of all my favourite things… it’s just such a dream come true. I love performing to stadiums full of fans, and hearing them sing back to me really helps me to live in the moment more.

Has there been anything that’s been difficult about going on tour?

Yeah, there’s been a couple of things that have been really hard. You don’t really get much time to yourself, and you don’t get much rest either. I’ve gotten really run down throughout the tour. There’s been days where I’ve felt so spaced out that I feel like nothing is even real, like I’m living in a dream almost. It’s been really hard to cope with, but when I perform it kind of pulls me back down to earth and grounds me a bit, like ‘it’s real! There are people and they’re here to see me and listen to my music!’  I feel like since I share a lot about my DPD people get a lot more of a realistic look into what it’s actually like to live with it. You don’t hear much about it, and it makes me feel better knowing that I can raise awareness of such an important issue while doing what I love.

How do you cope with the bad days?

I’ve started on some medication recently and it really helps me to just… function basically. I’ve found that it’s really important to take time for myself whenever I can, because I need to recover a bit between shows. I’ll spend a day just watching Netflix, doing facemasks, painting my nails, stuff like that, little gestures towards yourself that just kind of say ‘Hey. I’m taking care of you.’ I try and channel my feelings into my music, and since music has always kind of been my outlet, the shows are actually really helpful and therapeutic for me. When I hear people in the audience singing along especially, it just makes me think, like, maybe I’m not as alone as I feel. I think it’s the most authentic that I’ve been.

So how are you feeling about the future?

I’m really excited for the rest of the tour, but also grateful that I can take a break for a while. I’m looking forward to the US especially, and I’m really excited to meet everyone while I’m away, but in a way I’m happy that I’m going to be back in London for a bit. I’ve really missed my friends and my family, and it’ll be great to relax, at least for a bit. 

With a brand new album currently in the works and the remainder of her tour coming up, and despite her ongoing struggles with DPD, Sylvie’s future is bright and in the making.

‘If you ever need help, it’s so important to reach out,’ she commented. ‘Sometimes life just feels too much, and even though some days it can feel like you’re not a part of the world you’re living in and that nobody cares, I promise you that you are so loved. You can carry on.’

There are still some dates available for the United States leg of Sylvie’s tour, available on her website, www.sylviemusic.com. 

If you have been affected by any of the issues spoken about in this article, please call the Dissociative Disorders helpline on 1-800-950-6264.

Changes

• Changed ‘and the rest is history’ into something more specific
• Added name of album
• Expanded on Sylvie’s interaction with the magazine
• Described how Sylvie feels when performing and how she stays grounded
• Included how she feels about the impact of her music on discussion of mental health
• Changed reported speech near end into Q and A format

I hope that the changes that I have made have helped to fit the conventions of a Q and A article, as well as effectively conveying the correct tone for the piece.

Voice Memo

Draft Article

In 2014, Sylvie created her YouTube channel, where she would upload covers and original music, as well as more personal content about her experiences with the mental illness known as Depersonalisation Disorder, or DPD. The combination of her ethereal sound and her lyrical honesty surrounding this lesser-known disorder gained her a small but devoted fanbase, and the rest is history.

Since the release of her debut album last September, Sylvie has been on the road, touring globally to audiences of adoring fans. She took the time to come in and speak to us after the Asian leg of her worldwide tour, ‘F@!# My Feelings’, and we asked her what you wanted to know.

Q&A with Sylvie

Hi Sylvie! Thank you for coming in today!

It feels so weird to be here, I’ve read Violet since I was 14, thank you for having me!

So how’s the tour going?

Oh my gosh, honestly it’s so incredible. I love travelling and music and meeting my fans and it’s a combination of all my favourite things… it’s just such a dream come true.

Has there been anything that’s been difficult about going on tour?

Yeah, there’s been a couple of things that have been really hard. You don’t really get much time to yourself, and you don’t get much rest either. I’ve gotten really run down throughout the tour. There’s been days where I’ve felt so spaced out that I feel like nothing is even real, like I’m living in a dream almost. It’s been really hard to cope with, but when I perform it kind of pulls me back down to earth and grounds me a bit, like ‘it’s real! There are people and they’re here to see me and listen to my music!’ 

How do you cope with the bad days?

I’ve started on some medication recently and it really helps me to just… function basically. I’ve found that it’s really important to take time for myself whenever I can, because I need to recover a bit between shows. I’ll spend a day just watching Netflix, doing facemasks, painting my nails, stuff like that, little gestures towards yourself that just kind of say ‘Hey. I’m taking care of you.’ I try and channel my feelings into my music, and since music has always kind of been my outlet, the shows are actually really helpful and therapeutic for me. When I hear people in the audience singing along especially, it just makes me think, like, maybe I’m not as alone as I feel. It’s nice. I think it’s the most authentic that I’ve been.

Sylvie said that she’s very excited for the rest of her tour, but also grateful that she can take a break for a while. 

‘I’m looking forward to the US especially,’ she said. ‘I’m really excited to meet everyone on tour, but in a way I’m happy that I’m going to be back in London for a bit. I’ve really missed my friends and my family, and it’ll be great to relax, at least for a bit.’ 

Sylvie’s future is in the making, wWith ana brand new album currently in the works. and the remainder of her tour coming up, and despite her ongoing struggles with DPD, Sylvie’s future is bright and in the making.

‘If you ever need help, it’s so important to reach out,’ she commented. ‘Sometimes life just feels too much, and even though some days it can feel like you’re not a part of the world you’re living in and that nobody cares, I promise you that you are so loved. You can carry on.’

There are still some dates available for the United States leg of Sylvie’s tour, available on her website, www.sylviemusic.com. 

If you have been affected by any of the issues spoken about in this article, please call the Dissociative Disorders helpline on 1-800-950-6264.

Targets for Development

• ‘and the rest is history.’

• ‘since I was 14’

• ‘of all my favourite things’

• ‘I perform it kind of pulls me back down to earth and grounds me a bit, like ‘it’s real! There are people and they’re here to see me and listen to my music!’’

• ‘Sylvie said that she’s very excited for the rest of her tour, but also grateful that she can take a break for a while.’

• ‘Sometimes life just feels too much, and even though some days it can feel like you’re not a part of the world you’re living in and that nobody cares, I promise you that you are so loved. You can carry on.’