Feedback from Teacher

The embedded video is a Screen-Castify from our teacher giving us feedback on draft 2 of our music video. Below I am going to bullet point the feedback that we received.

Positive Points:

  • Good opening shot in slow mo
  • Nice to connect with the star as the lyrics begin
  • Good connection with the lipstick in mirror then on the actor
  • Nice close-up montage of getting ready
  • The shot with a close-up of Sophie’s eyes works well
  • Shot of Sophie sat on the rock hugging her legs works well
  • Fabric through the frame shots are framed nicely – work well & look effective
  • Close-ups that we have work really well
  • Likes the fourth wall break at the end
  • Good framing
  • A clear, effective narrative

Targets For Improvement:

  • Make first lip-syncing shot a bit longer
  • Would be good to do match-on-action with the lipstick shot at the start.
  • Close-up of photo when girl looks to photo
  • Maybe add a filter to flashbacks to show that the girl in reminiscing
  • Close-up of star’s hair cascading down her back – pick-up shot if needed
  • Pulling photos down – pick-up shot – make it a close-up – match-on-action
  • More singing close-ups/fabric through frame shot
  • Close-up of ripping the photo – demonstrate the importance of this moment, also a close-up of objects flying through the air after they’ve been swiped off the table
  • Nice to see what is happening on the phone – will shoot a screen recording and do a split screen between actor on the phone and the screen recording of what she is seeing.
  • More cuts to anxious.  facial expressions
  • Don’t over use the waves – only reference that once – waves will be replaced with other abstract shots such as rocks tumbling from a stack or a hand hitting sand into the air.
  • More obvious signs that the phone has flashed in the mirror
  • Pan/dolly around fabric through frame/pan or dolly around the star whilst singing so that it is not so static
  • Gain more match-on-actions detailing pivotal moments – more close-ups

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