These are the final drafts of my music magazine.
I feel that these adverts are suitable for the pop genre. They both use very bright, pastel colours which are highly applicable to the pop genre. Both ads use the colour pink which is a shade highly associated with pop.
Katy Perry is a typical pop singer so I feel that it is appropriate for her tour to be one of my advertisements. Givenchy ‘Live Irresistible’ is a perfume with a very sweet, floral scent; this relates to the pop genre because it is known for being very sweet and a symbol of innocence and creativity which flowers also represent.
The Mise-en-Scene in both adverts relates to my genre. In the Givenchy advert, the star looks provocative and is holding the pop by her mouth. She also has very bold make-up yet is wearing a white dress which represents innocence, peace and purity. In the Katy Perry tour advert, the star appears very edited. She appears flawless and has very over-the-top, bright make-up. This is a key feature of the pop genre.
My audience will be interested in these advertisements as my audience is 18-24 year old females. They are interested in pop music, so Katy Perry – a pop singer who they have been shown to like in my YouGov research – will be a very effective advertisement. Young females are often interested in perfume and scents, therefore a sweet, floral perfume advert will also be effective.
This is the feedback that I have received from my teacher on my penultimate draft of my music magazine. My feedback was mainly positive but there are several targets which I have been given on how to improve my drafts:
Double Page Spread:
These are the penultimate drafts of my music magazine pages. I have corrected the Photoshop around my main cover star’s hair, added a more detailed background to my contents page, and added an image of my main cover star to the background of my double page spread.
I have corrected part of my article so that my interview questions aren’t as repetitive and I have made my borders/underlining more interesting on my contents page. I have also added the inset to my cover page.
This is my article on the double page spread of my music magazine. I chose to write my article on my main cover star based around her winning the X-Factor and her struggles with mental health issues. I felt that these were appropriate topics as many pop-stars are very open/have strong feelings about mental health; many pop-stars are also well-known for winning the X-Factor.
As you can hear in this voice recording, one of my peers (Kirsten) has read through my article and has given me verbal feedback on what I can do to improve my article/the general appearance of my double page.
Based on the feedback that I received I have made some targets for further development:
Embedded is my table showing my for the different stages of planning and development that I have been through whilst preparing for my double page spread article. I have thought about different words and phrases that I want to use in my article and have also come up with some key questions that I can structure my article around. These questions will have to be discreetly included in my article due to my chosen structure (an interview).
Further down in the embedded document I have planned out my article. I have included several bullet points on the ideas/topics/quotes that I could use in my headline and stand-first, my main paragraphs and my conclusion.
This document is a general brainstorm for all of the ideas that I have for my double-page-spread article.
The article that I am using is from Billboard Magazine on June 20th 2015. The title of the article is ‘Adam Lambert: Don’t look back’. The article is written by Shirley Halperin.
This article is in the structure of an interview. This is evidenced through the constant stream of quotes from the artist. The journalist may have chosen to write up this article as an interview because it allows the audience to feel that they are closely connected to the artist, that the audience is speaking directly to them whilst they are reading the article.
Presence of the Journalist
I am aware of the presence of a journalist. This is due to the background information that is included about the artist; there are multiple quotes from the star himself embedded throughout the article, however; there are multiple moments throughout the article where the journalist will break-up the quotes from the artist using background information. The journalist also writes ‘he says’, ‘he admits’, giving off the impression that she was met the star himself to write up this interview and to gain quotes from him, clearly showing her presence throughout the article with these verbs. The presence of the journalist connotes that the artist is down-to-earth, it enables the readers of the magazine to feel engaged with the star, as if they have met him themselves.
Sense of Location/Event/Person
There are some very emotive words used. One quote from the star is “It’s hard for me to be happy with things.” This makes the audience sympathise with the star, it represents how truly difficult the star’s life can be and how much trauma/how many obstacles he has had to overcome. Another line says “Loneliness is a recurring theme”. This again illustrates the hard times that this star has been through and how it is hard for him to completely trust people.
Lambert states at the top of the second column, “Whats going to happen?”. This quotes demonstrates his uneasy/on-edge nature.
“Lambert is open about being “boy crazy” but ultimately feels lonely.” The words used in this sentence of the article tell us lots about Lambert’s life. He is connoted as courageous through the word “open”, it has in the past been very hard to be completely open about sexuality, earlier on in the article, the journalist states that Lambert “became the first openly gay male artist to top the Billboard 200.” Lambert is also represented as a very closed person and a hard-to-reach person through the phrase “ultimately feels lonely”.
The journalist doesn’t make their presence very well-known, they never speak directly to the audience or state what questions they asked, they just give the audience lots of background information on the star, then go into Lambert’s question responses.
The reader experiences feelings of sympathy after reading this article. We ultimately feel very sympathetic towards Adam Lambert due to his loneliness and inability to trust; we are given an insight into the difficult life that the star has led. The reader will also feel inspired after reading the article because there are some very inspiring statements in the article, especially in the journalist’s conclusion when they say that Adam Lambert believes “life’s about exploring new things.”
The journalist represents the star as very courageous however; the star is also represented as a very lonely individual. The journalist writes that darker themes, especially loneliness, is a recurring theme in Lambert’s latest album. Adam Lambert is connoted as courageous due to him being so open about his sexuality, this is a topic which can be very difficult for celebrities especially as they are constantly living in the spotlight, they could be judged for any opinion, any fact, any feeling. It is extremely courageous for Mr Lambert to be so open and the journalist clearly demonstrates this through his/her writing.
I have got some feedback from my teacher about my drafts of my music magazine. Embedded in this post is a Screencastify which shows exactly what feedback my teacher gave me.
The main points of my feedback are as follows:
After receiving this feedback through the below Screencastify, I have made some targets on how to improve my draft pages:
This is the improved draft of my double page spread. I have taken on the feedback from my initial draft of my double page spread and I created some targets on how to improve my work. My draft 2 has followed all of these targets and it is definitely an improvement on draft 1.
I have added page numbers to the bottom corners of my double page spread and have ensured that the page numbers I used corresponded with my contents page plugs. I have also changed ‘written by…’ to just ‘By…’ as I received feedback which told me that a magazine would not include the word ‘written’. I have also centered my quotes so that they look more like they belong in the article.
I received feedback that I should add a line under my headline to separate it from the bulk of my article. Drop capitals were also added to the first letter of each paragraph as professional magazines always have drop capitals at the start of paragraphs. I added ‘Photography by..’ underneath my images and also got rid of all my hyphens – I made sure all writing was continuous.
I added the same effect to the image on the left-page that the images on the right-page had. I also added my masthead to the top-left corner of my double page spread because I received feedback from my teacher that professional magazines have this feature.