Draft 5 – Almost There

As the deadline approaches  for component one, I am now on drafts 5 or 6 of each of my pages, and after feedback and multiple rounds of changes I have produced the near final products, seen below.

The above pages are from after my last round of feedback, which came from Miss Hales and I’m really happy with the end results. Some of the feedback she gave me for my pages included…

  • Increasing my variety of shot- She noted that I had very similar shot lengths within my magazine and recommended that I should introduce a close up shot. I have done this by replacing the middle image on the DPS.
  • Orientation and spacing- Throughout my magazine i have tried to keep the spacing correct and make sure that features don’t get too close. In keeping with this I have changed the order of the highlight images in the contents page. I have also checked and adjusted spacing of text on certain pages.
  • Clarity- The front cover as a whole has turned out well, however the text at the bottom has become slightly unclear when moving from a screen to paper. This is something that I have changed, to try and make the text more visible.




Design Skills 3

Although I’m approaching the final drafts for my pages, I’m still learning new things in the software.

One thing that I have learn recently is how to utilise layers in InDesign. I used these when making the fourth draft of my double page spread. The layers allowed me to separate boxes and make the document easier to navigate and edit. This is something that I wished I had used when making the over and contents page.

Another thing that I have started to use in both Photoshop and InDesign is rulers and guides. Rulers allowed me to measure and space the items of the page more evenly. Guides are really helpful and allowed me to line up different boxes across multiple layers, they made it easy to align the boxes on both the contents page and DPS.

Draft 5 Peer Feedback

A key part of developing my magazine is feedback, therefore I have asked Ben to provide some for all of my drafts. His feedback allows me to further develop my magazine pages and the identity of the brand. The feedback given to me bellow will help a lot in flushing out my designs for the final product.

In have embedded the document Ben filled out bellow. The work can be found here  http://blogs.grammar.sch.gg/harrytorode/2019/01/18/work-in-progress/


Advert For My Magazine

To complete my magazine I have to choose an advert to put into my magazine. The advert should fit my demographic, and their interests. I have been looking online and these are the options I found. Disclaimer these adverts are not work I have produced, these were sourced online for use my magazine.

Option 1 is an advert for a Bamboo brand graphics tablet. I picked this one because the demographic research showed that the readers work in creative fields including graphic design therefore this advert would work well. It’s very simple and features an innovative design, which would be interesting for my readers.

Option 2 is an avert for a beer brand, it also features a very minimalist design and would fit well in my magazine. The design Is graphically interesting, and features a unique image idea. I think it would fit well and it fits the age cap for my magazine.

Option 3 is a Nescafe ad. I like the idea here and thing the use of a coffee colour is very good. Again it would fit my magazine however I feel it is more boring than the previous design. I don’t think I will be choosing this one in the end.

I will experiment with both advert when I pin together my magazine, and this will allow me to see which fits best with the design. 

Peer Feedback on Article

To gather more feedback on my article, I have asked a peer to read my article aloud, the recording of which can be found below. This helps me to understand at what points my article may become more difficult to read, whether sentences are too long and if there are any noticeable grammar mistakes.

Having listened to Willem’s reading, I now know that some of my sentences are too long, or in particular feature too many comas, when I really should have started a new section. Similarly the language in the article is also being analysed, this allows me to see if any of it is incorrect or doesn’t fit within its particular place. Willem’s feedback has allowed me to edit my article to make it smoother and more refined, so I can put his improvement into the DPS.

Draft 5 My Work in Progress

These are my current drafts, and they have changed a lot since the last time.

I have changed the front cover by removing the grey background and changing back the original white one, I did this because I started to consider what material I would theoretically print to. The white allows me to use newsprint, which has a square texture, which allows depth between the background and print. I have also refined the plugs changing some of the wording and clarifying titles from the article.

The contents page has changed the least, I have removed the red lines and replaced them with the drum stick, added a few new images and changed some stories so that is ready for the final changes.

The DPS has changed the most and has a complete new design, with a two tone look, I have relocated the images and place the text below them. I have renamed the section to ‘Gallery Article‘ and added a much bigger headline. The stand fist is placed at the top near the headline and so is read first. I now have a drop capital and page numbers.

Draft 4 Feedback and targets

Front Cover- Feedback the Screencastify has given me some ways in which I can improve my front cover and other pages in the magazine.

  • Plugs– Change the wording of the top plug so that it becomes more of a headline, and less of a coverline. Miss also suggested changing the wording in the others to reduce repetition, this is something that I have already done in draft 4.
  • Alignment– There are a few points on the cover which require small alignment adjustments and changes the centering. This can be completed after the wording is finalised.

Contents Page- I was really happy with the design of this page so there is only some small changes to make in draft 4

  • Spacing– I have moved down the information so that it is just a little more spaced from the images. I have also changed the lines on the side and replaced them with a drum stick like the guitar not he other side.
  • Articles– As I head towards the final product I have started to change headlines, and replace black ones with article ideas.

Double page spread- This is the part which has seen the most change, I have revamped the design and changed what I am calling the section. here are some of the things I changed

  • Page title– Firstly I have changed it from ‘Exclusive Article’ to ‘Gallery Article’, I have made this text smaller and moved the headline to the other side, as this will be noticed when flicking through.
  • Layout– This is the most significant change, I now have a spilt design with grey at the bottom and white at the the top, somewhat like a gallery. Also I have moved the frames up to just bellow the stand first. The text is now in four shorter but wider columns at the bottom of the page.


Feedback on Article

I have now written my article, which can be found in full on the previous document. I have also inserted the article into the latest draft of my double page spread, which has changed a lot.

By adding the article to my DPS it allows me to receive feedback on how it looks on the page, as-well as allowing me to see how much of it fits onto the page. Therefore you will notice a ‘Continued Pg 82′ at the bottom of the article, this is simply because not all the article fits, and would have to be taken onto another page in the magazine.

I am happy with the way in which the article fills the page, and have tried to match spacing so the look is constant, I have also included a drop capital as this is conventional in many magazines, I have also tried to break up the text and clarify paragraphs by using both my Seirf and San Serif fonts for different section.

Article Idea Development

I have chosen to write my article about ‘The Strand‘ and their rise from small time artists to internet stardom. The article will include details on when the band formed, and how they met as-well as labels and the new album.

My article has to be relevant to my target audience and therefore, I will limit the content to alternative rock, and information relating to the band. Furthermore it will include musical terms and information about the band which the audience may be interested in, like how they make and distribute music and how they formed.

The ideas for my article have been lauded out on this planning sheet, it has helped me to organise my ideas into paragraphs, and make sure I include all the relevant material. I will try my best to follow it, as this wills top my magazine from going on a tangent.

Music magazine language analysis

To write my article I will first, analysis Billboard Magazine’s “The Next Frontier” from June 2015, this article details the rise of artists including Martin Garrix and Scooter Braun, as well as music agent Steve Angello, focusing specifically on dance music  and the rise of DJ’s as mainstream articles.

This article is not an interview or Q&A, instead it is written form a third person perspective, detailed the rise of EDM Dj’s, their rapid growth within the music field and the stardom which Dj’s like Garrix receive. Therefore we see a large image, across both pages, with the article itself being located in the bottom right corner. The plug and standfirst are on the left side and are unconventionally orientated vertically, which allows the plug to be much bigger without covering the image and stars. The article features black serif text against a white background, with a large pink drop capital which leaves the background due to its size. The article is in one column and therefore is easy to follow. Evidence for the presence of a journalist is given to us by the use of a third person perspective as well as quotations from an interview with Braun. This allows the article to be very coherent, as the perspective remains throughout the article. The article struggles to convey a sense of location, because as a reader we can see that the journalist has spoken to some of the people from the article, and has used there words with the article. The writing helps to convey a sense of the event, because the language used is convey a growth within the field, that is fairly new, therefore we can see that is trying the be conveyed. In the article there aren’t any similes or metaphors used, as this wouldn’t fit the genre. It would be more expected to see these in a pop or indie magazine, as the audience would be more open to this use of language. As mentioned the journalist has used quotes and questions to help convey the way in which the artist feels about the growth with the genre and how it has risen to become bigger than many others.

The journalist represents both the genre and the artists in a very positive way, and implies that their influence is positive on the genre and the music scene as a whole, furthermore suggesting the potential for new artists and group to overtake what would traditionally be the ‘big’ artist.