This is our draft four of our music video that we have constantly been tweaking and editing to create the best version that we can possibly make. What has changed in this video is that we have finally filled in the blanks so that we have a completed video from start to finish. We have also looked again at the text over the video and we think that regardless of the previous peer comments; the text creates a different medium and appears to be more targeting to the character and makes him look even more guilty as it looks like he is being scolded.
Below we have feedback of one of our peers assessing our draft four of what she likes and dislikes about the music video,so we have created a screen castify to capture her discussing her views and opinions of the video.
Our targets from our peer is that there is one main part where the lip syncing is slightly off and could easily be corrected.
Today we had a professional in Premiere Pro called Mr. Lenfesty, who came in to watch our music video and gave us great feedback on what he thinks we’ve done well, what can be improved and what we should change. Having someone with a great amount of experience and knowledge of using Premiere Pro enables us to improve the video immensely; as he has an unbiased view- therefore can give his thoughts on how it looks and the impact of the video.
The elements of it that we mainly needed help with was:
In one clip where the actor is running away from the camera there’s a blue bin that’s in the shot that could be distracting and not fit in, this is unconventional to our genre and it detracts from the character being alone, running away; it is a narrative addition that is distracted and unnecessary. Therefore, to solve this, he showed us to go into the tab called ‘Lumetri colour’ which enabled us to select the colour of the bin and dull it down to a grey shade by creating two adjustment layers, so that it blended into the surroundings and didn’t stand out as it wasn’t what we wanted the audience to focus on.
Below is a screenshot of after we successfully changed the colour of the bin bag:
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With this other screenshot below, we also used the colour wheel to drag the points of the bag to the colour we want instead of using the secondary colour bars as you can see in the screenshot above.
What Mr. Lenfesty also commented on was the idea that for the flashbacks we could use a vignette effect on all of the flashbacks so that they’re more clear and that the target audience don’t get confused between the flashbacks and the footage that’s meant to be the present.Therefore, we have taken in his advice and tried it on one of the clips to test it out, however we found it looked quite harsh and looked unprofessional in which Mr. Lenfesty then showed us that we were able to ‘feather’ the harsh lines out so the focus on him was more subtle. This resulted to drawing the audience’s eyes to a particular point on the screen, such as when we show a very short clip of blood on his hands- we can us the vignette to focus their attention on the weapon instead of anything else, therefore the main points of the narrative can get across the the target audience and cuts out the confusion.
Another thing that Mr. Lenfesty helpfully implied that we should do was to not only organise our folders in our main files, but also name and organise them within Premiere Pro as you can put them in a ‘Bin’ (which is their term for a folder), and the best part of this was that he showed us how to duplicate the file for our current edit of the music video so that if were not sure whether to test something out and it goes wrong, then we can test it on the duplicate and it won’t matter if it goes wrong as we still have the original.
Our teacher has watched our 2nd draft of our music video to give us feedback on the elements of it that needs more developing and the parts that we have done well, knowing this enables us to reflect back on the video from another person’s point of view.
What went well:
What needs improving/ideas to enhance video:
Quite a fast opening, a lot to take in
Good close ups
Could get Harry closer to Sal to show a connection
More reference to lights
Blue bin in the way of running shot of Harry
180 degree rule almost is not applied in a few shots
Start with a close up or some angle that gives a connection to Sal and the audience
Is the text supposed to be there? If so, is it conventional?
Quality of harry close up doesn’t appear as good as the other shots (which is because of a grainy effect)
Harry is a bit smiley in one of the shots
Slow down the clip of Sal
Good cuts for pace
Needs match on action- he was past the bin last time
She knows the lyrics well
More cuts nearer the end to create energy
More lip gloss needed on the close up
For the shot of him stabbing, need to get in there and create fast pace
Getting the shot of the police car is brilliant and very conventional
Need a recurring theme of blue lights
Good narrativebutneeds more cut to reaction and match on action
Need a long shot of her, as it is all very stationary
Sal in streets by her self singing?
Now after reading and going over these comments, we understand that we need to figure out whether we need another shoot to get in more blue lights and more shots to cut to; or we could just improve our editing skills in Premiere Pro, so for example we can play around with the colours of the clips and maybe add a blue light effect. However, if we don’t know how to do this, we can research tutorials on YouTube.
To make sure we cater for our audience we have deeply researched the type of person that would love our music video, and what reasons they have for consuming media such as Instagram and YouTube. Theorists that understood this important factor were Blumler and Katz who explained that there were four uses and gratifications, their theory further illustrates an active audience and four reasons for why and how people consume media, which are: Information, Personal Identity, Social Interaction and entertainment. Therefore, I have looked on a site that I have previously used called YouGov and searched for the typical people that would enjoy R&B and the site Instagram, In which you can see the outcome below, where they are a female between the ages of 18-24 that live mainly around urban areas such as London/Manchester/Brighton etc:
After researching this, I have created a fake dating profile of the typical audience, and have included what they like, their passions such as her favourite music (which is our genre) and primary information. Stuart Hall was a theorist that discussed how the audience can reject the ideas if they strain too far from the typicality of the genre, this is called ‘Oppositional’, however when the ideas are accepted is is labelled ‘Preferred’, so in result of this theory I have made sure that I take in what ideas that would be rejected by the audience, such as; if the music video had more heavy rock themes rather than R&B.
As we are now working on draft three of our music video I have gained many new skills on Premiere Pro whilst editing, as beforehand, I didn’t know how to to anything on the software and since experimenting I have learnt many things such as:
Cutting and putting videos together
Putting effects on a clip
How to import audio
How to slow down and speed up videos
How to mute clips
How to export them into YouTube videos
These few examples can be seen in the following images:
One skill that I picked up quickly was reversing a clip, this helped give a sense of despair, paranoia and guilt; as he runs his hands through his hair. When we were experimenting with changing the speed of the clip we were going to slow it down, however, we came across how to reverse the clip which we tried and really liked.
Another skill I have learnt on Premiere Pro is putting effects on footage and manipulating them to my satisfaction. An effect that we think works really well is the glitch like — that we created by changing and moving the colours slightly to the right which gives off a really cool glitch-looking effect that makes the clip look distorted, and gives off a sense that there is a problem and gives connotations that his head is messed up. First of all we had to copy and paste the footage so that there is three clips of the chosen scene all together, then search in effects for ‘RGB colour’ and apply on all, you then change one clip to all red, the second to all blue and the third green, after, you change the position of each colour which results in this glitch effect that you can see below.
We also have exported our music video drafts onto YouTube, so that our progression is clear, we can reflect on each one and see what else needs to be done. As you can see below, I have taken a screenshot of my YouTube channel where I have uploaded the first two drafts, the first video just consists of only the performance, therefore, it is very easy to see where we have improved in our editing. However, we also saved our drafts in our music video folder labelled ‘Drafts’ just in case anything is lost or deleted we have back-ups saved.
Many things have improved in this video due to the constant learning of how to create effects and edits for the video, so what we have added (clip-wise) is the footage of the treacle being poured on him so that the metaphor of paranoia can be produced. Our teacher also commented on the previous draft explaining that the narrative was quite confusing because you don’t see who he murdered so we put in the footage of the victim walking past and Harry watching him as we found as it made more logical sense. (You can see this at 2:09).
Another element of the feedback that we considered, was the point that the audience don’t really have enough time to see the clip of the screwdriver as we didn’t put in a slower close up in the previous drafts, nevertheless, we made sure to put it in in this draft (3) to show improvement of the video- and now watching it, it works really well and is more clear. this can be found at 2:13.
Also, we have put in many effects to make the video look more interesting, such as the overlapping echo effect, a grain effect to show his mind isn’t clear, and created a glitch to represent that somethings wrong and that reality is distorted for him.
To truly understand the pros and cons of our video we have had peers to comment below what they think works well and what could be improved; hearing their views has made me realise a few things, such as maybe the metaphor of the paranoia (treacle) covering isn’t quite as clear as we thought it would be. On the other hand, we have had many comments about the editing to the beat and about the strong performer really makes you believe she’s singing.
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After reading these, I have now created personal targets which are:
Continue with the editing to captivate audience
Look at different fonts for the text over the video ‘needs to be more distinct’
Need to think about how I can make the metaphor more clear
Need to fill in the rest of the video as we have not fully completed it yet.
Overall, reflecting back on the shoot, I think that we were very organised in the sense of: time, locations, props and the footage we got. Also making sure that we stuck to the 180 degree rule and used the rule of thirds in the majority of our shots so that we can gain the best outcome to our abilities.
Throughout the year of learning about cinematography, it has enabled both of us to understand how to make a video more intriguing to the target audience; such as communicating meaning so that they want to end up watching more of it, this is why we have made sure to film many shots and angles of him looking worried to make the audience wonder and ask ‘why?’.
Below are images that I took on the shoot that show a great example of distances that we used to make sure our video didn’t consist of just the same angles; as it would seem repetitive and would lose the interest of our audience.
Tripods leg broke so had some shaky footage
Could do with more match on action shots i.e when he reads the threatening note
The camera wasn’t screwed in properly therefore wobbled now and then (however only affected a few shots)
Good variation of angles and shots
Followed our story board
We got coverage and filmed more than we needed just in case
Targets: Our main target that we discussed was to check all the equipment is not faulty before we take it out filming for when we film the treacle scene which we plan to show flashes of throughout the music video to represent the paranoia.
This is our second draft of the music video, and a lot has changed since our first draft which were just cuts of the performance with no music, we have also added in the narrative to it that we have filmed recently so that we now editing both the narrative and performance shows that the video’s coming together; which you can see in the video above. However the blank parts in the video still needs to be filled in by other footage that has not been filmed yet- which is of the actor getting dark treacle poured over him throughout the video to represent the paranoia taking over him.
The elements that I like and think we did well were:
The rythm of the editing to music
Lip syncing was in time
Good variation of shots
Clarity of footage
Great representation of paranoia by using different angels to capture reaction.
1:22-1:26 shows good editing to create a sense of anger
And what I didn’t like:
Needs more fast pace editing when it comes to him killing the man etc
To put in the long shot of her walking to the curtains
Some performance shots are too long and may lose the interest of the audience
At 1:20 minutes the camera gets knocked
Need to get the footage of the performer on the phone and the scenes of him being covered in treacle
The editing of 2:28 to 2:35 needs to bet cut faster as it needs to be a panic and a high pace scene.
Overall, my targets that need to be more focused on are to get the missing treacle footage shot, and of her on the phone as soon as possible so that we don’t waste all our time editing without all the shots.
Creating a risk assessment for the filming of our narrative for the music video makes sure that we evaluate any hazards possible, and so that the shoot goes as smooth as possible. We have included the specific risks in this document and how they will be controlled to enable safe filming. The person/actor that we are using to film in our narrative is over eighteen; so we have just asked for his permission as you can see he has signed in the image above.
The production meeting agenda allows us to be further organised for the narrative shoot when talking about: dates, times, props and clothing etc. As you can see in the attached document; we have covered all of these things, not forgetting the location and who is bringing what, so that nothing is forgotten on the day and that it runs fluently without any mishaps or faults.