Feedback & Reflection on Draft DPS

Peer feedback on my DPS-

  • Change the colour of my drop shadow on my pull quote
  • Make sure the stand first isn’t too long and that its short snappy and hooks the reader
  • Try and use two columns instead of three to make it seem like less writing

Teacher feedback on DPS –

  • Re use the blue colour from the drop capital/masthead in the images and the body copy
  • try and reframe the background image
  • Add the page numbers
  • use the blue, white and black colour scheme more

Targets for further development –

I think my main focuses will be on experimenting with my background image and see how it looks reframed, I will also look at adding more of my blue into my DPS to make it feel alive and vibrant and finally make sure my stand first is snappy and hooks the reader.

 

Self assessment-

I think that my double page spread is in need of a lot of improvement. I like the draft currently but I think after adding these additional comments it will make my double page spread much more “put together” and closer to a final draft. I am going to try out the blue colour scheme again, however I do feel like the pink gives the blue a break for a bit. I will try out every bit of feedback and come back to this to see if I used them or not and why.

A New Improved Contents Page

I changed a lot of things about this poster for my final draft. My first draft was very cluttered and didn’t fit right on my page. If you look back to my first draft you can see that I have improved a lot with my conventions and the design. Here was the list of improvements I made for myself which I think I stuck too quite well:

  • Create more than one shade of blue for my spots
  • Add more pages and names
  • Make the names bolder and bigger than the page number
  • Make one or two magazine articles stand out

I think this contents page has a very clear theme of jazz and a blue colour scheme. I have made sure that each page name is bigger than the page number to attract the audience with these interesting headlines. I think that for my final draft, it seems to fit well with my magazine.

 

Draft of Content Page

This was my first contents page draft. I like the theme of the blue spots and thinks is brings back to the theme of jazz. The photo itself isn’t very colourful so I think that with a splash of colour, it makes it much better. However, in this draft I wasn’t too sure with the layout. As you can see I only included 6 pages which clearly wasn’t really conventional due to most magazines having at least 20+ pages. Therefore, I wouldn’t be able to use this layout meaning I have to change it. I think my targets for my next contents page are gonna be:

  • Create more than one shade of blue for my spots
  • Add more pages and names
  • Make the names bolder and bigger than the page number
  • Make one or two magazine articles stand out

Adverts

ADVERTS

 

I thought that this magazine ad was very appropriate for my magazine. Considering that my magazine is based around music, I though of ads that would like to be advertised in my magazine. I found this ad and thought that my audience would love to see these sort of adverts instead of a pointless advert which isn’t related to the magazine at all.

Once again, this advert is based on music. This is important to continue the flow of music and not find interest in elsewhere. This is an advert for new headphones which my audience should like considering they love music. This will be very useful for my audience when they’re out and about so that they can still listen to the music produced in my magazine.

I believe these two adverts fit perfectly in my music magazine. The dating profile I made for my audience shows that they are very dedicated when they like something and works hard at it. I think that my audience will love to know of these ads to help gain a better understanding with the music in my magazine.

A New Improved DPS

For this new improved DPS I changed the following:

I added a pink (slightly transparent) background for the text to make it more legible.

I added page numbers and credits for article and photos.

I added a cross through the word Rivals to emphasise that they are no longer in competition with each other.

I made the stand first shorter and gave it a different font.

I changed these aspects to my double page spread due to the feedback given to me from my peers and teachers. This was constructive criticism which I think improved my DPS a lot.

What is a Contents Page?

 

Contents Page Layout Sketch:

I like the look of the first draft as it shows photos in the form as an old fashioned photo strip. I haven’t ever seen a contents page like this which suggests to me that the audience will be more intrigued by this design. The second design looks formal and shows big titles, which is a key feature in any contents page. This will attract the audience by its classic design of a contents page with a slightly more formal aspect to it. The third draft shows a unique style which seems to be more fun and decorative. This would more likely to be used in a less formal magazine, which suggests that I wouldn’t use this design for my contents page, but I think in another magazine it would work well. Out of all the designs, my contents page is most like the first draft. I listed my page numbers and included a big photo like the draft. I think this was a sensible choice for my contents page as it was not too laid back but not too formal.