Feedback

On Thursday the 17th and Friday the 18th of September we had two visitors who were Specsavers creatives, come in and give us advice about how to improve on our music video, as one of these visitors watched our first draft he gave many points that could improve the quality and emotional tone of the narrative.

The feedback they gave was that the first draft cut was very effective and used interesting shots of the girl and portrayed the themes of failures, he stated that we needed to focus on making the stairs look even more abstract to juxtapose the naturalism of the school scenes. With improvements on what we are trying to portray to an audience and a clearer narrative in the video we can make it look extremely effective.

This advice that one of the creatives gave us matched with what our teacher stated about making the difference between the beach to the stairs and school clear to the audience so that nothing is confusing, they both said to use interesting shots to get the narrative across but do not overcomplicate the editing, keep it simple and effective.

Targets

• think about angles and composition
• use more interesting angles
• emotions within shots
• make it confusing
• remove the context
• make it feel like just stairs
• be selective with stairs
• keep it graphical
• edit shots
• no blindfold
• make shots seem confusing
• pick a barrier and a door

List of new technical and creative ideas

• use barriers to compose shots
• use doors to give context
• overlap shots in editing
• edit the shots in effective ways
• make it abstract
• make the shots very graphical
• smoothly edit together shots for flow
• make the transitions smoother

YouTube tutorials 

Here are two youtube videos that would help with the second draft of our music video due to the effects and visual techniques they mention: