Feedback on Article
This is the peer voice memo, reading aloud my article 1st draft to me on my double paged spread.
I was given effective feedback from my peer, which included:
- Quotes were effective and were used in the correct way to interest the reader.
- The repetition of the artists name is not necessary, therefore use the artists performance name firstly, and in the formal article use his formal, actual name.
- There is a good use of names and dates as it legitimizes the article and information
- Swear words should be uncensored due to the type of magazine it us, being aggressive and rebellious.