January 15

Feedback on Article

This is the peer voice memo, reading aloud my article 1st draft to me on my double paged spread.

I was given effective feedback from my peer, which included:

  • Quotes were effective and were used in the correct way to interest the reader.
  • The repetition of the artists name is not necessary, therefore use the artists performance name firstly, and in the formal article use his formal, actual name.
  • There is a good use of names and dates as it legitimizes the article and information
  • Swear words should be uncensored due to the type of magazine it us, being aggressive and rebellious.

Posted 15th January 2018 by noahwhitmore in category Music Magazine

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