Since writing my first draft I’ve made quite a few changes to my article. Firstly, after reading it through aloud I realised that it didn’t read as well as I would like it to so I made a couple changes to the punctuation and wording to correct that.

My second issue came from my teacher’s feedback which was that it seemed too autobiographical and needed a bit more drama and exclusivity. To change this I added in a story exclusive to the magazine wherein my stars admit to suffering with mental health issues after the fall of their label, promising to have a new image for this decade. This adds a bit of drama and shock for fans who didn’t know this information about the stars’ personal lives.

Click here to view my new improved article, with all my edits highlighted in red to make it clear what’s been changed.