For our draft 2 we made some changes whilst also adding in some new footage. This included the sock puppet narrative footage from shoot 2; we also experimented with some colour filters on some of the narrative shots. Overall I think the layer over the narrative shots needs to be more obvious compared to the performance segments so that the difference is more clear and the dream-like flashback idea is more clearly portrayed; the layer also should be over every narrative shot instead of just a few so these improvements can be made in draft 3.
Something that was a positive change we made for draft 2 is we added some shots as the music fades away into instrumental at the end. I think these shots are effective because they seem candid and off-guard which fits in with the slow conclusion of the song. The performer slowly walking away from the camera at the end also illustrates this well because it clearly shows that it is the end of the story.