This is the Draft 1 of our thriller “Lissette” As you can view below we have cut down and edited our thriller adding in different transitions and filters. When compared to the narrative cut, you can see a number of clips we cut down to make the narrative quick and easy to follow, we found that using the narrative draft helped us to outline the mystery and enigma that was going to be included within our thriller, so when we started Draft 1 we knew what to include to expand on that enigma element.

below is some feedback left on our Draft 1, these comments helped us to gain an understanding from the perspective of the target audience, the comments they left were useful and helped us to further develop our Draft 1, it also gave us an insight into what the target audience thought went well and what didn’t, we have taken into account the ideas and are implementing them further into our final draft.Comment:

• Used a variety of shots
• Used good mise-en-scene
• Used typical iconography of a thriller

Target:

• Edit to make more narrative sense
• Introduce new editing techniques to make the narrative easier to understand