The feedback I was given after my fifth draft didn’t give me many things to improve on so to make my sixth draft better I worked on making the integration better, meaning I changed the quote on the front cover to match a quote from my article and removed her last name to match the name of the article in my double page spread. I also changed the design slightly on the contents page to the caption fit on the black boxes better without being different sizes.
Final Points to Improve Upon
- DPS- Add a comma after the however in the second paragraph
- DPS- Either add a widget to the second paragraph or remove the widgets from all the others
- DPS- Change the page number to 5 and 6
- Contents- Make the page number of the contents page match the new page number
- Contents- Remove ‘the’ from ‘the BABYMETAL’
- Contents- See if the main proper nouns that are capitalized would look good in colour
- Contents- Make the quote from Scott Truesdell easier to read
- Contents- See how inserts 7 and 13 look with a white border
- Front- Add another cover line saying something like ‘more on’ or ‘inside’ above the cover lines at the bottom