Embedded Draft 3 video

What has changed?

From getting feedback from the teacher, we made multiple changes to this third draft of the music video, we made the narrative clearer to understand and toned down on the editing techniques so that it was less confusing and intense. We then effectively separated the stairs and naturalistic scenes by linking the stairs with her mind and the tension in her head, by doing this we made it clearer to what was going on in her head to what was happening outside and in her life.

By having the beach shots at the beginning and the end of the music video it gave a cyclical structure to the video showing that she got to the place of serenity she wanted to get too at the start of the video. We made the stair shots more effective by including more interesting angles and sharper shots that were clear, we sorted out the continuity error in the video so that it all made narrative sense. Overall I think this third draft is a major improvement from the second draft of the music video as it is easier to understand and watch.

5 Comments from Peers/Audience

Getting feedback from peers and the audience is very important to know what to change and alter for a better draft, it is important for a music video producer to get feedback so that they can improve the video for the target audience. With this personal opinions we can do another edit on the music video and do major improvements on the narrative and editing for the final draft.

Peer one:

• good variety of angles used in the video
• effective shot composition
• good variety of interesting effects
• video is visually appealing
• maybe slightly less transitions
• video can look too busy at times
• title text could be centred
• use a more artistic font e.g typewriter style

Peer two:

• good overall story
• plot line is clear
• more possibilities of match shots
• interesting angles
• good overlays with sunset
• many shots are repeated
• some transitions are disorientating

Targets for improvement

• use a more interesting font for introduction and ending
• do not repeat shots
• do not make transitions disorientating
• make the video less intense at some points
• add some match shots