Here is a small clip of my classmate Elliott reading my article aloud to check for punctuation, grammar problems and typos. Below that you can see his verdict on the article giving some feedback on how I could better the article for my next draft.
Below this, you can see targets for improvement that Elliott gave me after reading out my article.
- You could Put FACADE In apostrophes/ Speech marks
- The use of Slang and embedded quotations gives a personal tone, encouraging the reader’s interest in the article.
- The Biography article seems like an interview, for example ‘he said before taking a sip of his Mocha’, This suggests that the journalist in in an interview with Taylor as he is commenting on his actions after asking specific questions, It suggests that the journalist is with Taylor Rather than writing about him.