Peer Voice Memo
To ensure my article had no mistakes, I asked a peer to read it out to me. This was helpful as it gives me an idea if a sentence is too long.
Targets For Improvement
- Some more quotes could be added to get across more feelings from Luna Park about her experiences of her rise to stardom
- There needs to be an apostrophe on Parks advice
- Could state who the other stars that she is planning to collaborate with are
- Explain what she is doing specifically to work hard for her fans