Draft 2- Feedback

After uploading our draft 2 to YouTube we got some feedback over the comments.

Some of our performance shots seemed to be a bit too long however the lip syncing is good which we took our time over to make sure we got correct. Our variety of shots are good however some appear to be a bit shaky which we could adjust. Also we link in the lyrics with what is going on in the narrative and performance which is what we wanted to achieve.

I also collected feedback on a feedback sheet, view this below:

From this, our stronger points are the use of shots, how we used rule of thirds and the variety. Also our use of mise-en-scene is appropriate to the genre for example, our performers costume in the white dress and her make up reflects the Indie Folk genre. However, we could use some more editing techniques in premier pro instead of just the razor tool and cutting to make it a bit more interesting.

I also got some recorded feedback, this appeared to be most useful.

What we did effectively was the silhouette shot by the fire and the rest of the fire shots are good. The use of colours from the sky and the pan are nice and work well. Our use of lip syncing is really accurate. We use good camera skills and a variety of shots, the rule of thirds is evident when they’re in the car and the lighting on Ellie’s face when she is performing in the studio good because it focuses just on her singing. The selection of lighting when she is alone the lighting is low key and when they’re together the lighting is high key which reflects the audiences feelings. When she is centre of the screen it draws attention to her which is what we wanted to achieve. As for the ending of the music video the blur out is a good way to finish on.

To improve and what she didn’t like was the shaky shots however a couple of them work as it can be point of view shots. The use of mise-en-scene in the white dress lacks continuity as you can see the performers top straps underneath and a few shots later, they’re gone. However, the use of the extra material reflect the title of the song but gives her a religious look. The shots of her walking down the stairs is a bit too long, we establish that they’re the stairs for too long before she walks down them.

I also got vines from another media student for feedback on my draft 2:

‘I like the variety of shots that you use.’

‘I like the black and white shots to show her emotion and anger.’

Targets.

To improve our music video even more, we set ourselves targets on what to adjust and amend to make our music video as good as it can be. We’re going to crop down the shot of the performer walking down the stairs so that it doesn’t appear to long and also cut some of the irrelevant shaky shots out.