Here is Draft 4 of our music video.
Summarised feedback from Mrs Cobb
- Come in with first shot sooner
- Fill in black screen at the start
- Add guitar close up sooner
- Band shots bright and cheerful flash backs need to be down and de stressing
- Stabilise or remove room shot
- get rid of shot where I look into camera it breaks the forth wall
- Stabilise bedroom shot, scale in and scale out the shot
- Stabilise close up of Brandon
- use different shot as its out of focus
- It needs close up intimate shots
- They both need to meet at bus stop
- sequence on sofa in threes; high five, cheers, another jump cut
- shot reverse shots in the sequence
- no repeats
- scale in shot of me on the top of the bunker
- Ending needs work, theres a better place to cut it
- use shots of me and Brandon forming the band.
- Graphic match between the boys meeting and playing as the band
- cut into drum sticks hitting drum
- cut into foot tapping
- show a connection between both boys
- use colour correction
- Make the music stop in the right place
- Meeting scene at the bus stop
- More close ups!