This is my first proper Draft for my thriller. It includes for refined edits so there is a story that is noticeable and not just a narrative.

This is some feedback I have received for my thriller.

Good points:

• Uses great mise-en-scene
• Has a good continuity
• Good match on action
• Doesn’t brake 180 degree rule

Bad points:

• The boat scene needs to be shorter
• There is an obvious relationship between the characters
• Some shots are slightly too long
• There needs to be a transition at the end

When re-editing my thriller I will take these points into account and edit accordingly. For instance I will make the boat scene shorter and add a fade to the ending.