Our teacher has created a screencastify on our draft 2 so that we can assess the feedback we are given and work upon it to make our music video as successful as possible – it has been embedded below.

What worked well

• Good angles of sofa in the therapist shoot
• Aimee breaks the fourth rule – she comes out of character which works well and can be done more frequently throughout the video
• Low angle of Lukash on the hay bales is effective
• Good mirror shot – works well and doesn’t have camera in it either which can be hard to do
• Good energy with edit on beat
• Performance footage was better in the outdoor location at the abandoned bus
• Close ups of Aimee in therapy worked really well to convey her emotions

Targets for improvement

• Even though the tilt judders it works well so we will have to redo it amongst our other shoot
• When Aimee puts her hands to her head we should cut to a close up so that there is more connection with the audience regarding her grief
• Get rid of the performance clips infant of the blinds inside
• Jump cut performance shot of Lukash on the hill? – keep audience engaged
• Play with the colour on the hill shots?
• Missing parts of the video – both narrative and performance – need to carry out more shoots, especially more performance as the interior shots that we have are no longer going to be part of our finalised video
• More shots can be stabilised using a tripod / a tracker
• Crop out the bushes on the clip of Lukash on the hill
• Get Lukash (the performer) in interesting positions – moving through frame? don’t have him in middle all the time as it can get boring as a consumer – play with the angles and framing of the footage
• Create a short story to include within the video – make an ending – have it so that the audience are consistently engaged and understand the videos narrative in chronological order