I got my friend Lewis have a look at my draft above. He pointed out a few things:

• The image might be too dark
• You cant see the models
• No page numbers
• The images focuses too much on the window
• weight the font less

He also said some positive things like:

• He likes the font
• He also like the colour scheme and font size
• The layout are also good

After the feedback I have set myself some things to change in my second draft. I will add pages numbers,  I will also play around with font , I will change the the image to one that still fits my genre but makes the DPS much better and clearer and finally I will possibly change the page layout.