December
4
Draft Feature Article
My first draft corrections:
I read through my double-page spread article in order to check for any spelling or punctuation mistakes and to also make sure that it reads well. By doing this, I have found some things that I need to adapt and change:
- spelling and punctuation
- sentence structure
- finding adjectives for words so I don’t repeat them
- the natural flow of the article
Second draft:
Targets for development:
- be more specific on the location – make it personal to the artist
- add some reported speech to make it a bit more varied – e.g. went on to explain a stpry of her youth (can then go back to verbatim speech)
- mention one of the songs in a little more detail
- comments/observations from the journalist
- add some personal journalist opinion/reference at the end