I have watched the screencastify, and will summarise the feedback, and include targets of development (ToD) after
Summary:
- Change some of the editing at the start- e.g cut to Lewis at guitar riff
- Transition at walking towards camera- i.e black coat causes transition
- Long Shot from behind, cutting to different angle, and cut back to walking up stairs
- Out of focus shots
- Need Point-of-views, i.e Lewis’ perspective from going down the stairs, to up- show his exhaustion
- Some slow-motion could be added in narrative
- Some cut to close-up, i.e becoming disheveled and show this
- Danger sign cut out
- Cut, match-on-action, e.g coat falling on floor
- More lip-sync, i.e more close-ups of lip-sync
- More close-ups, e.g bin moves through the camera
- Half-dozen pick-ups
- Finish narrative
Targets of Development:
- More variety in shots; i.e; close-ups, long-shots
- Editing; cuts, transitions at better times, slow-mo
- More lip-sync
- Need Point-of-views
- Fix/cut out unnecessary shots