Narrative Rough Cut Feedback
In order to advance and create our first draft of our music video we needed to receive some feedback on our narrative rough cut. We do this in order to give us a clear understanding of what within the music video needs to be changed, what needs to be added and what could be removed.
In the comments we received a comment from a member of staff giving us feedback on our narrative rough cut. In the comment she talks about how the narrative feels incomplete and that the actress could be dressed better for the video, these are both points that me and my partner both agreed on and both felt that we needed to change.
To see the comment click the image below.
We felt that we needed more feedback as the points made by the teacher where what we already felt as a group, so in order to receive any additional feedback we presented our rough cut to a group of students.
To watch the students response to our rough cut, watch the video below.
All the comments made by the students are repeats of what we felt as a group and what had been said in previous feedback received. By doing this we have solidified our feelings towards the narrative and what needs to be changed.
After hearing feedback from both a teacher and students within our target audience we as a group decided on targets for our first draft:
- Include the girl earlier to allow the narrative to make more sense
- The repeated shot (same location, looks very similar to a previous including the stalker), removal will allow the video to flow better
- More air time for the narrative, allows more of a plot to develop and can connect to the audience more
- Include the ending and our proper start with the Mona Lisa, will allow the narrative to really make sense, and provide the motive and appropriate finish