For the third draft of my contents page I made the barcode smaller and added another cover line. I also added the cover star’s name to his cover line.

For the third draft of my contents page I made the page numbers the same size and added a name to the poster. I also added a little more variety to the fonts.

For the third draft of my double page spread I added a silhouette of the model with a white outline behind the text. I also fixed the text wrap around the fretboard and added a little more colour to some of the text.

Targets

• Front Cover
  • Make model and masthead bigger
  • Align cover lines
  • Add another coverline
  • Add something to the top right corner

• Contents Page
  • Overlap poster
  • Link model caption to article

• Double Page Spread
  • Add colour to quote

I chose these adverts because I think they would mesh well with the target audience.

Download Festival is popular with listeners of my magazine’s genre.

Fender is a popular guitar brand and a lot of people who are enthusiastic about music especially in my genre would be interested in this ad as they often play instruments or want to play instruments.

Marshall is a popular brand and people in bands in my genre need amps. A lot of people who are interested in music play instruments or are in their own bands.

I chose the Bose advert because a lot of people who are interested in music want to listen with good quality headphones.

I think that these adverts will fit my audience’s demographic of mostly millennial males well.

For the second draft of my double page spread I have improved the cut-out of the model. I made the headline smaller so it fit on one page and didn’t cross over the stapling area. I then made the quote smaller so that the headline was still the biggest text on the page. I removed the hyphenation from the article and improved the text wrap.

Targets for final draft:

• Make him bigger and over the background so that he goes over the background at the top more i.e. overlaps the black onto the white more.
• Make the columns more interesting, colours, quotes, etc by adding some design graphics? a Guitar logo opaque in the background behind the copy?
• Fix text wrap under the fretboard needs aligning better.
• Could the page numbers be in a colour?

Contents Draft 2

For the second draft of my contents page, I improved the cut-out of the model and added the poster to fill up space. I also added a drop shadow to the main image. I added another cover line to be consistent with the front page and make it less empty. I tried aligning the text to the left but found that it looked better aligned to the centre the way it was.

Targets for final draft:

• Caption the poster
• More font variety
• Make all the numbers the same size
• Make the model bigger?

For my second draft I have heavily improved the image using Photoshop. I used the clone stamp tool to remove the reflection from the bass guitar, improved the cut-out around his hair, removed spots and blemishes from the model’s skin and brightened the model’s irises.

I replaced the poster image with a photo from my location shoot, and captioned it with the name of the artist. I also added another cover line to fill up empty space and changed some of the fonts.

Targets for final draft:

• Another coverline for another artist
• Fill empty space in the top right
• Say who the “bassist” is
• Make the barcode smaller

 

The first draft of my double page spread went okay. For my second draft I have five clear targets.

• Fill up some of the empty space on the left page
• Improve the cut-out to get rid of the white parts around the model
• Get rid of the hyphenation and refit the text on the page
• Make it so that the page fold doesn’t conflict with the headline
• Change page numbers to match the contents page