After reflecting on my previous work, adding more detials and refining existing material I have reached the below full second draft of my magazine including the most recent contents page.
I then sent this file to my teacher for feedback, received as below;
From this, I deducted the following main points on how to further improve my magazine;
Cover
- Make the price higher
- Change the yellow sticker on the left side to have a grainier, grungier effect
Contents Page
- Fix the alignment in the left column
- Change the colour of the number 10 in “Top 10 Upcoming Bands”
- Change the mission statement font
- Move the caption for the giveaway photo and further specify what it is
- Add a third sample album cover and make them slightly bigger
Double Page Spread/Article
- Seperate the standfirst from the body text
- Move the drop capital to the beginning of the body text
- Justify the both text to both sides
- Move the photo/article credit
- Include model signatures rather than a caption explaining who they are