As part of the editing process of our thriller we constructed a draft 1 which showcased our thriller with narrative sense and a first layer of editing. This layer of editing consisted of adding shots from the second day of filming to fill in the gaps of narrative sense and inserting transitions and filters to add tension.

We also received feedback from other groups for the purpose of constructive criticism.

These pieces of feedback areas follows.

  • The pan is quite jolty and very stop and start, I like the montage and the effect that the establishing shots give, however I am not a fan of the fade between each shot. I really like the rope and the dice part as it was quite effective.
  • the montage at the start is very effective there is a lot of walking, it could be cut down a bit really like the angles and shots used-they make it interesting to watch good match-en-action when they are speaking it needs to be re-cut as it is cut short in some places, in others doesn’t make sense and the door doesn’t shut either makes you want to watch more as you don’t know whats happened to them or why.
  • The narrative makes sense and flows well. I would suggest to use colour correction to add to the thriller. Mise-en-scene stuff is really good. Also the montage was cool.
  • The continuity is good and it makes good narrative sense. I like the establishing shots and the beginning. However there’s a lot of walking. You could cut the walking down to create more pace. You have good match on action especially when they pull the rope and the dices roll along the floor. In addition you have a good eye line match when they go to look at the dice. However at the end when trying to open the door it doesn’t make sense as he walks to the door to try open it and the next scene is of him walking towards the door.

Based on the feedback that I have been given I have set myself these targets.

These targets are as follows:

  • Include less walking so as to increase the momentum of the shots.
  • Make use of different angles to make the shots more interesting.
  • Ensure that the shots are stable and not shaky as this will improve the overall quality of the thriller.