As part of the editing process of our thriller we constructed a draft 1 which showcased our thriller with narrative sense and a first layer of editing. This layer of editing consisted of adding shots from the second day of filming to fill in the gaps of narrative sense and inserting transitions and filters to add tension.

We also received feedback from other groups for the purpose of constructive criticism.

These pieces of feedback areas follows.

• The pan is quite jolty and very stop and start, I like the montage and the effect that the establishing shots give, however I am not a fan of the fade between each shot. I really like the rope and the dice part as it was quite effective.
• the montage at the start is very effective there is a lot of walking, it could be cut down a bit really like the angles and shots used-they make it interesting to watch good match-en-action when they are speaking it needs to be re-cut as it is cut short in some places, in others doesn’t make sense and the door doesn’t shut either makes you want to watch more as you don’t know whats happened to them or why.
• The narrative makes sense and flows well. I would suggest to use colour correction to add to the thriller. Mise-en-scene stuff is really good. Also the montage was cool.
• The continuity is good and it makes good narrative sense. I like the establishing shots and the beginning. However there’s a lot of walking. You could cut the walking down to create more pace. You have good match on action especially when they pull the rope and the dices roll along the floor. In addition you have a good eye line match when they go to look at the dice. However at the end when trying to open the door it doesn’t make sense as he walks to the door to try open it and the next scene is of him walking towards the door.

Based on the feedback that I have been given I have set myself these targets.

These targets are as follows:

• Include less walking so as to increase the momentum of the shots.
• Make use of different angles to make the shots more interesting.
• Ensure that the shots are stable and not shaky as this will improve the overall quality of the thriller.

Below are screenshots of the editing process that shaped the footage we had shot into draft 1.

After the initial day of shooting as a group we compiled all of the shots we got into order to see if they made narrative sense, naturally there were gaps and some shots were missing. This meant that we would have to go back to Fort Richmond to re-film so that we could get the shots we missed out on the first day of filming . In preparation for re-filming we created a new production meeting agenda and shot list.

These new documents are below:

The rough cut is all of the shots that we acquired from the day of filming put into order, so as to provide narrative and to have a clear outline of any shots that we needed to shoot on the second day of filming in order to fill the gaps that we left from the first day of filming. By making a narrative rough cut we are also able to have an idea of what we will need to do when we reach the editing stage of producing our thriller. I feel as if the narrative rough cut was successful in serving its purpose of making clear what we needed to do in order to form complete narrative sense, improve our thriller and gives us an insight into the obstacles that we would have to tackle in the editing stage.

Improvements that are to be made are:

• Fill the gaps in the narrative.
• add tension and atmosphere.
• Make a clear antagonist to add to the tension and atmosphere of our thriller.

On Tuesday the 29th of November me Caitlin and Alex went to Fort Richmond to film for our thriller, we had another group with us who were our actors and when they filmed Alex and Caitlin were their actors. The weather was sunny but very cold however, this necessitated that we all wore very warm clothes to prevent us from getting cold. In this blog post I will be evaluating both the highs and lows of the day and also improvements that were required for our second day if filming.

The high points of the day:

• All shots that were taken were filmed well and with little trouble.
• In all the shots that were taken we ensured to never break the 180 degree rule.
• We made changes to the way we planned on shooting the “666” element of our thriller that proved to be far more easier than the way we initially planned on filming it.
• We added extra shots to what was on our shot list that proved to strengthen the narrative.

The low points of the day:

• There was definite lack of mise en scene in our thriller.
• By the end of the day we began to rush many of the shots out of fear of running out of time and coming away with shots missing.
• We forgot to bring a board game which was a vital prop for our narrative sense.

Targets that were set for the next day of filming:

• Fill in the gaps of the narrative/the shots that we missed on the initial day of filming.
• Ensure that we had the missing props to strengthen our mise en scene.
• Redo shots that were either out of focus or not filmed to our satisfaction.

The risk assessment is another document that was used in planning for the filming day. The risk assessment contains all of the likely/possible hazards that may occur on the day of the filming, clarification that the “risk is adequately controlled”, the actions that will be taken in the instance of this hazard and finally everyone’s signature to show that they understand everything that is written on the risk assessment.

The production meeting agenda was a document that was used in preparation for the day of filming. The production meeting agenda is a document that contains all of the vital information of everything that must be prepared in order for the filming to be a success, it contains: The date of the shoot, the location, the actors and their costumes/makeup, props and finally who will be filming what shots. The production meeting agenda was used mostly as a checklist so as to make sure that we had all we needed for the shoot. It was also used for clarification on anything that we weren’t sure about in regards to the shoot.

The shot list was another planning document that was made and brought to the filming at Fort Richmond with the purpose of having a clear and concise list of shots that we needed to achieve in order to attain narrative sense that satisfied the storyboard. The shot list also included the sketch of the shot (taken from the storyboard) and clear instructions for how to shoot the shot.

Below is an image of the shot list: