Here is our draft 4 of our music video.

Some things we changed are:

• made our flashback more successful and obvious by using the swirl effect
• added the echo effect on the walking for continuity
• added some more close ups of arms closing and shoving the pastel girls
• added some more of the pulse effect for consistancy on the beats of the music and the strong words
• added the strobe/inverted effect in more places for consistancy
• included a cross dissolve for the aerial shots of the flowers being added into the bath to make the flow better
• added a darker effect on the goth emerging from the bath to imply she has ‘gone to the dark side’ and changed
• included more split screens
• added a tint onto the fist clenching to emphasize the ‘governments’ anger and to show something is going to go wrong
• edited the dragging pace of edit to the beat of the music and the words in the lyrics

Comments from peers:

Overall, Zoe really enjoyed our music video and thought that it was effect. She understood our narrative and the message that we were trying to get across. However she also gave us some feedback to improve on which we will use as targets for our final draft:

• experiment with the inverted strobe effect and change the colours so there is some colour added to the music video
• when the goth section of the narrative comes in, experiment with changing the colour/tint on the performance videos to link with the rest of the video
• the CU of the mouth shot – try and make it more clear what it is saying – maybe film it again and Eve move her mouth more
• add a fade out at the end of the video as it doesn’t go completely to black after the rotating effect

Feedback from teacher:

• opening shot of Elisha on ground is wobbly
• some of the shots of Eve could be canted like they are later on. This will create some depth/dynamic
• opening of girls could cut between long shot to close up of legs to long shot again and then the reverse mid shot
• close ups – i.e. scale in for some of the team girl dancing in a line to create more pace
• when Elisha doesn’t keep up – can we get more connection with her? close up or some effect around her to make her stand out even more?
• all the girl dancing sections should have the echo effect
• any close ups of the flowers in the bath to cut into?
• cut between her struggle and close ups of the water sloshing more
• at 2:21 she submerges for the first time but she is already in the bath?
• effect at 2:23 could be used earlier on the Eve static shots?
• the transition to the black bath could be more dramatic? cut to black or white screen so it is heralded more?
• blowing the flowers – more of a diffused edge to the vignette/frame
• dressed as goth – the colour needs to be darker with more fx to create that change
• the glitch at 3:06 with her fists works well – could you use this on the other getting dressed as the goth shots?
• like the lips multi-screen – perhaps use it somewhere else as it stands out a little bit at the moment
• when she disrupts the dancers – we need some glitch, colour fx to create that aggression?
• add some slow mo in the initial arrest?
• slow down the spiral at the end so that we are left with it disappearing after the song has finished