I asked Harriet to give me some feedback on my contents page so that I can re-draft it and make it as best as it can be.

I asked her the following questions which she responded with some constructive criticism.

How does the Contents Page work in tandem with the front cover?

Harriet said that they work very well together because they both relate to the music genre. She said that she loved the idea that I have done a pink background and yellow image on my front cover and then the opposite on my contents page. However, she did tell me to make sure that on both of the pages they are the same shade of pink.

Describe the images of the stars using adjectives.

She used the words;  Sassy, bold, confident to describe my cover star. She also stated that my star looks like Ariana Grande which I am happy about because as I have stated previously, she was my inspiration for my magazine. I am also happy about the adjectives used to describe my star because it was exactly what I was going for when I chose the MES. 

Which cover lines tempt the audience to read on and which ones stand out and why?

Harriet said that page 11 stood out to her because it talks about the Hollywood movie and she thinks that it looks interesting and it would make her want to read it.

She also said that the page talking about Ariana Grande’s hair caught her eye because it would appeal to my target audience as they would want to know hair tips from a celebrity.

How do the cover lines reflect a music magazine? If they don’t,  which ones need to be adapted?

She said that I should make sure that there is no hyphens to make it look more professional. She gave me an example of my cover line that mentions Justin Beiber to get rid of the hyphen so that it read album and not al-bum.

She also suggested that in the cover line where I talk about Chloe’s Hollywood movie that I should talk more about her career change from singing to acting because my magazine is about pop and not about movies so to make it more conventional, I should talk more about music.

Which areas, aspects have distracting areas of integration of copy and images?

Harriet said that I should move the text with the cover lines and wrap it around the model’s body to add more dimension to it. She also said that I should make the colours the same shade as the front cover and that I should make the orange box fit around the model more as it looks slightly odd in the place that it is at the moment.

What aspects do you consider conventional or unconventional (page numbers, inserts, captions, catchy cover lines, editors comment?

She said that my cover lines are conventional as they are aspects which you would find within a contents page. She also said that images are conventional as they give you a glimpse of what is in the magazine.

However, she said that I should add more images because magazines tend to have more than one cover star on the contents page to grab the reader’s attention.

Targets to improve; 

• I should change the shade of pink to make it the same shade as the front cover.
• I should remove the boarder around the ‘contents’  to make it look more professional.
• I should wrap the cover lines around the model so that it makes the magazine look better and fit the model.
• I should change some of the cover lines so that they are more to do with the pop genre and my magazine.