We were sent feedback in the form of a screen castify by our teacher so that we could identify what we needed to work on in our video and what to add.

• Dissolve the edges of the panel that shows the seawater
• More close-ups of eyes opening
• Make the clip of the leaves falling longer or delete it
• Close up after the model starts singing
• Leave the second clip of long shot of the model in path till later
• Really good close up of the first graffiti clip- shows intimacy
• Zoom in on the midshot of the graffiti wall. Have the model bigger on the left-hand side.
• Don’t repeat pathway clips.
• Put narrative in instead of singing the “whoas”
• Crop the graffiti wall shots closer
• Cut out some of the sitting clips
• Cut out a lot of the studio-based ones
• Don’t repeat shots
• Center the car park clip closer
• More close ups
• keep nature for narrative.