This is Draft 4 of my music video:

Things we changed:

• made our flashback more successful and obvious by using the swirl effect
• added the echo effect on the walking for continuity
• added some more close ups of arms closing and shoving the pastel girls
• added some more of the pulse effect for consistancy on the beats of the music and the strong words
• added the strobe/inverted effect in more places for consistancy
• included a cross dissolve for the aerial shots of the flowers being added into the bath to make the flow better
• added a darker effect on the goth emerging from the bath to imply she has ‘gone to the dark side’ and changed
• included more split screens
• added a tint onto the fist clenching to emphasize the ‘governments’ anger and to show something is going to go wrong
• edited the dragging pace of edit to the beat of the music and the words in the lyrics

Comments from peers and audience:

Overall, Zoe loved our music video and thought that it was effective. She understood our narrative and the message that we were trying to get across. However she also gave us some feedback to improve on which we will use as targets for our final draft:

• experiment with the inverted strobe effect and change the colours so there is some colour added to the music video
• when the goth section of the narrative comes in, experiment with changing the colour/tint on the performance videos to link with the rest of the video
• the CU of the mouth shot – try and make it more clear what it is saying – maybe film it again and Eve move her mouth more
• add a fade out at the end of the video as it doesn’t go completely to black after the rotating effect