Our teacher has left us some feedback through a platform called Screencastify, this allows her to narrate her thoughts and feedback to us as she watches it. I have embedded the video below:

Targets for our next draft:

• Make opening shot longer or comply with rule of thirds
• Have a close up earlier on in the performance and then can cut back
• Lipstick narrative – jump cuts must be in threes otherwise it looks like a mistake
• Pick up the bottle quicker and lessen the delay
• Cut to close up of cake detail
• Ensure performance shots don’t break the fourth wall
• Make the cake smash more significant with a close up
• Change the walking up to the church scenes to slowmotion to signify impending doom
• Add in more rotation to chaos cake scenes – gives energy
• Have groom’s reaction shot earlier on in the sequence
• Slow down the low angle grass shot
• Edit out people in the background
• Close ups of romantic shots and slower action
• Colour filter on the performance to differentiate or use effects to contrast
• More connection between the girls
• Use colour to help convey emotions in the narrative

From this feedback I have learnt that whilst editing we need to pay closer attention to rule of thirds, particularly in our jump cuts to make them look sleek and purposeful. We’d like to use this advice in our next draft to add effects, make it more interesting and ensure the narrative is conveyed correctly.