Here is the second draft of mine and Paige’s music video. We have made some changes since are first draft.

Changes we have made:

• We have added in the copyright to the right.
• We moved the record company logo to above the copyright.
• We centered the lyrics on the hand and changed the names around to form more of a circle.
• We adjusted the red in the Photoshop edit of the newspaper collage, we made this brighter.
• We removed the redness from the lips in our collage, as we felt that this was too overpowering as we made the red brighter.
• We changed the font of the artists name on the front to a more handwritten font.
• We made the album title larger on the front.

Teacher Feedback:

We then asked our teacher for feedback on our second draft, to see what improvements he suggested and his overall thoughts on our piece.

Our targets for improvement include:

• Try different fonts for the word Betrayal as there could be a better one
• Draw out some of the reds as we did on the inside right on the front cover
• Rotate the bar code on the back to face the same way as the text.
• Make the font on the hand a brighter red so it matches.