This is my new draft of my article. I made a few changes in my article which are highlighted in red. I think that these changes will make my article more hooking for the reader as it is more interesting for them, and will provide them with ‘exclusive’ information and gossip. I also corrected spelling, punctuation and grammar mistakes that I had made.

My targets after this draft are to make sure that it is even more interesting and hooking for the reader. And to also make sure that I present it well on my double page spread.