Our draft 4 of our music video is inserted below. We received feedback in conversation with our teacher and previously had feedback from our peers – this wide range of people who are feed backing on our video, along with ourselves, will enable us to have a broader variety of pros and cons, meaning that we can make our music video the best it can be.

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What went well

• The stare at the camera at the beginning of the video is effective as it creates a connection between the performer and the audience
• Editing to the beat is accurate and allows the audience to remain engaged throughout
• The change in storyline when the suitcase is being packed adds attentiveness for the audience – the bag packing sequence works very well
• The edited to the beat clips of Lukash on the dirt hill are effective and show a variety of techniques in relation to editing to the beat
• The shots of Aimee lying on the bed after Lukash has gone communicates her loneliness to the audience well
• The mid shot at the end of the video adds continuity to the entirety of the video

Adaptations to make

• At the beginning have the clip of Aimee distressed, to the therapist, back to Aimee. This will create continuity / strengthen their relationship for audience consumption
• Performers in distance in the field – remove
• Add in some canted angles to create more interest for the audience
• Lukash on hill – have some similar edits post production to make it more interesting and engaging for the audience
• There is a sudden swap from the lovely memories to something going wrong in the relationship – colour correct? To signify the different times in relationship
• To create more of a dynamic, cut between the long shot of Aimee throwing to Aimee throwing the clothes towards the camera
• Scale in to Aimee throwing the clothes – emphasise a difference in shot distances
• Long nodding scene of the therapist – shorten it
• Scale on to Lukash lip syncing ‘Flo where did you go’
• No point in the pan in the bedroom as it is not panning towards anything except a blank wall – remove
• Scale in on Lukash lip syncing in the greenery
• Continuity is wrong at the boat scene – needs to be Lukash running over the crossing then Aimee’s point of view, then have Aimee run across
• Scale in to Aimee rocking at therapy at the end